Click. Click. Click. Slam!
"Houston, there is a problem."
See this screen? It's blank you see, like damn!
"Mom, can you call Comcast, please?"
My Wi-Fi isn't working and I'm about to die
Oh come on, pick up the phone! It will be a breeze
Give me that, you're being obnoxious! Do you see my face? I'm dead serious
My heart is beating faster and faster in anticipation
The line connected. "Yes, I'm here to pay my bill. Yes, yes! I'm furious!"
"Give me a moment, ma'am. Your Wi-Fi will be back on its way."
I smiled with glee and refreshed my computer screen
Welcome back online. My computer read. You paid your bill and I'm here to stay
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never had wi-fi lol
Hi there, Gaurav here for a review.
] I have very little to critique, so I will talk about the points I loved in your poem.
You have touched a very sensitive issue! [It's really close to me. I can't imagine my life, without Wi-Fi
Here's a line, which connects with almost everyone. [Personally speaking, I have been witnessing, poor internet connection and terribly slow Wi-Fi for about a week. That makes your poem, even more loveable XD]
Secondly I love the humour in this poem. It's neither forced, nor does it have Laugh-out-Loud moments. It's something which tickles your funny bone, because it connects with you nicely.
Lastly, I haven't read such a unique poem of late. The subject is unique, the presentation is refreshing and there are absolutely no grammar errors! (I guess, my review has more errors than your poem
wow you make me awesome! I didn't know I actually wrote good poems!
Amazing! Loved it
thank you!
Willow here to review!
Ah, yes, the wifi going down. What a tragedy.
I liked this poem, a lot. It had it's own creative spark of humor to it, but was also the complete truth.
I mean, no WiFi is a serious problem. Right?
I didn't really get there third stanza as much as I got the others... but, I may just be slow. XD
Otherwise, I don't have much to critique. Your spelling was spot-on and grammar seemed perfect.
I found just one tiny error:
You should be your.
Well, other than that, everythin seemed pretty good.
Hope this helps!
WillowPaw1~
dang it...........almost perfect. lol XD. thx so much for pointing that out, I never would have noticed that! And the third stanza was the person taking the phone from the mother because she wasn't making the call fast enough. Thx again, though. I love adding humor into my works!
Almost XD
And okay, makes more sense now. Keep writing!
i shall!!!! hey can you do a review for a story i wrote? it's the first chapter. It's a batman story. I need to know what people think of it and i like your reviews. It would be a big help! Thx again, though!
I will! I'm working towards my 4th star
Hope you get it!
Thank you!
Oh, yes, lack of wi-fi is a very serious problem.
Your poems are so fun to read. I notice that you have a very similar rhyme to your poem titled "Crush". Is that a coincidence? This poem speaks only the truth. I literally have no idea what to do with myself when the internet is down. I love how lighthearted and humorous this is, turning a first world problem into something very serious. Very funny, and well done! 
thx and yes it is the same with my other poem. I love using this certain poem format. And I love adding humor into my poems or stories. Thx again. I'm glad you liked it! Thx again!!! :3