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Re: Irreconcilable Differences
Oh, wow! This is absolutely amazing! I like how it's all prose-y in it's formatting, but it's really poetry at heart. The word choice is so poetic and lyrical. It ...
May 24, 2014 -
Re: I wrote this when we were dumb and happy together
Aw, you're too hard on yourself! This isn't a piece of trash, it's actually quite good! This is really cute and sweet. There are a few mistakes that need to ...
May 21, 2014 -
Re: Stephanie Pritchard's Life Chapter 1
Hi there! This comes off as a bit of an information dump to me. Now we pretty much know everything there is to know about Stephanie. Surely there could have ...
May 21, 2014 -
Re: My First Poem
Hello, and welcome to YWS! This is pretty darn good for a first attempt at a poem. The rhyme scheme works out nicely, and it flows fairly smoothly, although the ...
May 21, 2014 -
Re: When one has lost everything....
Hello, there! I'm going to be really nitpicky here, so I hope you don't mind. If it seems harsh, just remember I want to help. This is going to be ...
May 20, 2014 -
Re: Let Me Help You
So I'm not a Kpop fan, so I won't be reviewing the content, but just skimming this story I can see that it needed a lot of grammatical work, so ...
May 20, 2014 -
Re: The Adventures of Chancho and Theodore ~ chapter one
Sorry it took me so long to get back to this! Your new version is much more descriptive and enjoyable to read. I found myself laughing at the beginning. Now, ...
May 19, 2014 -
Re: The Adventures of Chancho and Theodore ~ chapter one
Hello! Here to review, as requested! Your storytelling leaves a lot to be desired. Beginning by having the characters wake up is a very cliche way to do things. If ...
May 18, 2014 -
Re: Boundless
Hello, there! Wow! For a poem so short, you really pack a lot of punch with it! I like how the ending is sort of melancholy, but the overall tone ...
May 18, 2014 -
Re: The Astronaut
Awwww! This was really cute and sweet. I love love love the metaphor throughout the poem. Your use of imagery is fantastic throughout, and it never seems clunky. This is ...
May 18, 2014 -
Re: Dodder Vine
Hello, and welcome to YWS! I really liked reading this short story. The beginning part, about the Dodder Vine, was what really inspired me to read this. That was a ...
May 18, 2014 -
Re: Tethered
Hello there, and welcome to YWS! I promise you will love it here! So, I really enjoyed reading this. It was very poetic, and flowed very well. It is kind ...
May 18, 2014 -
Re: A Sanctified Heart
Wow, this is quite a deep poem! I've never really been a religious person, but I still really enjoyed reading this. The rhythm was breathtakingly beautiful, and the rhyme scheme ...
May 18, 2014 -
Re: prologue
Hello there! Even though there are some things in this story that I personally don't agree with, I'm going to ignore that and review more technical stuff, which means that ...
May 18, 2014 -
Re: Lost in a Book
Oh, yes, I know that feeling all too well. While I can totally, completely relate to this poem (I would imagine that most people on this site can), it's like ...
May 17, 2014
