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This poem is very relaxing with all the questions and thoughts that the narrator puts down on paper. The title even makes this poem more interesting. When do we have ...

As far as your muse is concerned, I believe you still have it. You have an excellent use for half rhymes. You make the words fit with each other very ...

Keep the paragraphs closer together unless there is a setting change. "...with a clatter though he barely noticed the sound. With a flash of panic, he realized that there was ...

Stories of this topic always give me the chills. I have a ton of friends who are gay, and I can't imagine how living with parents who are so opposed ...

This whole poem made me shutter with fear. The imagery you put into this is perfect. A TV screen flashed in my head, and I could picture how dark the ...

This whole poem gave me the complete and utter chills. With every piece of advice he gave the narrator, there is always a comeback to break my heart. In a ...

This poem you have here speaks the truth? If normal cannot be defined, then what makes abnormal and original words? Plus, I love how you make the words, "Normal," "Abnormal," ...

I love the intensity of this story. I just have a few things for you to edit to make your story better. "I can't even be bothered, describing how I ...

Such metaphors and imagery. With each line I read, I can imagine those metaphors coming to life. I can feel the narrator becoming more and more scared as I read. ...

Though this poem didn't rhyme, it flowed very well in this piece, it surely did. The imagery of the nighttime is brilliant. I could see it right in front of ...

"Except for our hearts," That just makes more sense to me. There are some lines that are too repetitive. I mean when you repeat the same word in two lines, ...

Such perfect imagery. At each detail I read, I could just build this princess up to be the character she was meant to be. I can picture her sitting on ...

I can't figure out whether this is a historical event in the eyes of people living it or poverty in the present. I found it very good to read for ...

Man, childhood sucks, doesn't it? If I could change some events that happened in my life, I would've kept my friends instead of tried to be popular...well, if I only ...

This poem is a lot darker than I expected it to be. However, for a slam poem, I really liked it. I would love to hear this out loud. I ...