before he left he told me three things

wow that was a good piece. your title is very interesting and so is your poem. i like the use of quotations to say his words and brackets to show your condition. it is quite a smart use and i would myself like to use it in my next works.
now for the nitpicking , i would like to suggest a few points-
" first-time roses "- what does this expression mean? there are many descriptions that one can hint at with this phrase. my arrows are going in opposing directions and i am really not able to make an equivalent vector so you may as well just answer it.
" i forgot what his fingernails felt like.)"- this is a vivid imagery but some pain is missing. i suggest you use ' i am fighting to forget how his fingernails hurt". it will just display the pain you had gone through , if you really want to display it in that sense. however this is fully your choice where you may look at it from a different point of view.
"under your skin, ", this word " under" lowers the strong standard. perhaps you may use "beneath" in its place. check it it sounds better, if you are pleased then you may as well change it.
"let your demons see you cry.", i thing changing the word " yours" to the would be more appropriate, won't you agree. as you see there are demons inside and out, why blame one when you can indicate all.
i really liked your work.
keep writing,
Rituparna

First up: it's spelt Colosseum (or Coliseum). It also refers very specifically to the ampitheatre in Rome - rather than a generic term for where you might fight lions.

What I liked about this is your willingness to experiment - to break out of a standard template and try something different. There's bravery in that. The mix of emboldened text with quoted speech and parentheses, split into three sections, certainly makes it stands out.

But, ultimately, I think the poem fails.

The message of the poem is lost because it is diluted into three parts. They are linked, yes, but they reference unique feelings, and this creates a shallowness to the poetry. It does not dig deep enough into any of the three sections to make an impact. If you are going to split it into three parts, I'd like to see stronger, identifiable links between the three, that means as a reader I understand what the poem is trying to put across. The disconnected flow from the variety of techniques also creates a sensation of you simply scratching the surface of something which probably has a lot more to it. I want you to really get inside these three things you have been told, rather than simply reacting to them in one or two lines in parentheses. I'd expect to see a much longer poem if it is in several parts, or alternatively three seperate poems to do with each "idea" (which you could then gather together into a small collection, potentially called before he left me he told me three things). That would give you the opportunity to dedicate more effort on each "thing" and hopefully create more impactful poetry which really gets into the core of each idea.

The 3 things he says are akin to phrases on the inside of a greeting card. They are riddled with cliches. Bright moon, stardust glistening, glowing from kisses, monsters in my head, closing your eyes, blah blah. I've read it a million times before and honestly they are now meaningless. They are present everywhere. They say nothing new and your poem suffers from their blandness. Try and come up with new ways of describing things, of experimenting with language, so that your words are interesting and memorable. The art of poetry is using the huge potential of the english language to steer away from the normal ways a human might use language to describe a situation, and take us in a new direction.

The poem seems more for yourself than for the reader. This in itself is not a problem, if you simply want to reflect on your own life through the medium of poetry. If you want this, however, to be enjoyed and understood by others, and want to improve your writing to the point where it could be published, you'll want to consider the needs of the poetry reader. This seems openly about your experiences at the end of a relationship, or at least someone you love (potentially a family member) leaving your life (be it temporarily or permanently). I used to write poetry similar to this in the past. I credit you for not overly navel-gazing, but it is nonetheless overly personal, and the reader struggles to connect to it, as they are not given a real chance.

I hope my comments stimulate some ideas for your next draft of this. Good luck.

Somehow, this poem doesn't seem finished. I feel like I was just given a half a story or a cliffhanger. It's just that last line, it makes me feel like there should be more but this is a poem, a great one by the way. This is really nice, I like the feel of it.

LLLLLLLLLET'S GET READY TO RUMBLLLLLLLLLLE!
Charizard821 here for a review! I must say, this poem was quite unlike any other I'd seen. This is most likely because of the pure originality of the piece. With little to no spelling mistakes and your sentences flowing perfectly, I'd say that this poem is a major success. Way to rock YWS! (Hey, that rhymed!)

I jus simply like it

Hey sugar. Let's dance.

I think the biggest thing that I'm noticing is you have such a flow and rhythm in the very first non-bold line, then you throw that completely out the window with a long winded, wordy line in the second. This completely wrecks your flow and leaves me gasping for breath, not to mention it makes the repetition go from a clever flow trick to annoying and obvious. On top of it, you try to regain flow with an inadvertent rhyme: streets/bedsheets", which is promptly thrown out the window for the rest of the poem.

Then you go off and have a period on every single line, and maybe I've just gotten so used to poetry without punctuation but I find it renders the flow so very choppy. The fact it's one sentence per line and both lines are so straightforward in comparison to the second non bold line, which is quickly looking like a non-sequitur, it really stands out. Not to mention I'm struggling to tie the concept of "multiple homes" to the resulting dialogue, because you don't seem to reference it at all. I like the idea of multiple homes. I don't get an explanation of it.

The strongest in here is most certainly the second passage, if only because it actually works as a whole unit, from bolded lines to brackets. The other two stanzas have this sharp disconnect between the concepts in the bold and the actual poem itself. The third stanza doesn't seem to have a tangible connection between glory or shame or even quietness, and the brackets seem particularly disconnected. You have three ideas and while the bold and the stanza are metaphorically connected, the brackets and the stanzas also metaphorically connected (barely), the whole thing just doesn't come together for me.

Overall, this isn't your best. It's not exactly what I'd call forgettable— I've puzzled it over too much for that— but it's also not exactly what I'd call good. The concepts are fantastic and I want to like this, but there's really this sense of being stuck in a lurch when we don't have quite enough information to really understand and get a lot of stuff out of here. I can't tell if this is meant to relate to a father or an ex, and in general it feels too disconnected to really sing.

Hope this helps. You know where to find me.

~Rosey

This whole poem gave me the complete and utter chills. With every piece of advice he gave the narrator, there is always a comeback to break my heart. In a way, these sayings are true, and they are meant to be comforting. When I read all three of the bolded lines, I felt as if I would use those for real life as well. I can also feel the pain in the narrator's heart. It breaks my own heart, too. I love your work. Please keep writing.

This is a very interesting poem. I literally read it three times because I felt that the more I read it, the better I would interpret it's true meaning. I'll admit, I still haven't fully figured it out, but I've never really seen something quite like this. And by that, I mean the way you sort of reply to the poem as you go.
For example,
"there are lions inside of your heart,
and they will eat you alive if you don't let them out
fight them in your colleseum, but don't let your demons see you cry."

(once I found out the monsters are in my head, I stopped wanting to fight them.)

It's unique and I find it very interesting. You should be very proud of yourself because this is the type of writing that could take you far. The only thing I would advise you to do is keep your eye on the capitalization and punctuation. It may seem minor, but it's more important than you think.

Well, that's all. Spectacular job, see ya later.

Simply beautiful. I love the great description in this poem and how you stun the reader with your words. The messages this poem sends is very powerful. When I first saw the title I had to read this. A few things you might want to look at are grammar. Like putting a capital letter at the beginning of the title,or beginning of the sentences. Other than that, you have done well. This is a very good poem. You should enter contests, because you have a gift!