cassie17

He was brought here on sunday. He CAME on a Sunday sounds better...please capitalize Sunday in this line and the next. It's a day of the week, not an ice ...

Hello! Please make sure you do 2 reviews for every piece that you post on YWS--keep a 2:1 ratio. This poem really confused me...make sure that you have a central ...

Hi, Lizzifer! Flutter Flutter Little heart why are the first three words capitalized? I think it is okay to have the flutters capitalized, but I don't think there is any ...

Hi! I do like the edit much better. I only have one problem and it's with the last line: to unlock my pressuring cuff? Mostly, I don't like the word ...

This was very hard for me to read. I would suggest reading up on grammar, punctuation (especially around dialogue!) and where to start new paragraphs. I could go through the ...

Hello! The meaning behind this poem was very nice, hmm? Yes. Very good--reminds me of something I saw on Oprah a few days back :) First off, I'd like to ...

Great job! I'm not going to point out the punctuation problems, etc., since that's already been done, but here goes: What I liked: I liked right in the beginning, you ...

This is great. I'm not going to be really nit-picky because that's already been done. I just wanted to say that I was reading this article on Oprah's website about ...

I really like this! Of course, I'm a fan of no-punctuation pieces, and this one was fast and quick, but at the same time slow (in a good way!) and ...

Alright...well, just so you know, you need to do 2 reviews before you post something of your own. Keep a 2:1 ratio, okay? So get out there and start reviewing! ...

Hi! Make sure that you review at least 2 pieces before posting your own. YWS keeps a 2:1 ratio on reviews to postings of your own work. But anyway, on ...

Hi! This was definitely an interesting and unique poem! Onto the review: You know what I want? I want some string cheese! I'm awfully hungry; could you pass me some ...

Hmmm...someone mentioned something about free-verse. I think that would suit this idea amazingly well. To be honest, I didn't even realize there was a rhyming scheme until I read some ...

Wow, great job! I loved it so much. The imagery was perfect, beautiful. I liked the no-punctuation thing until it became inconsistent. Anyway, on to the review: "Do you remember ...

I'm pretty sure the point of this was to actually have all of those spelling and grammar mistakes, right? Because, if so, I'm going to put away the dictionary/grammar handbook ...