Hey!
I thought this was an excellent short poem. Just one thing I saw wrong witht the first oen and you fixed that in the second one so i won't mention it. The only thing that bugs me just a little was the last line.
"To unlock my pressuring cuff?"
I think it sounds a little akward. It may just be me though because no one else seems to think so. *shrugs* Well, keep up the awesome work and hope to see more of your writings.
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