carolinewashere

These poems were good. Some of the rhymes felt forced like with hours and connoisseur and the end and there wasn't really a rhyme scheme there were just some rhymes ...

Very nice job. It is a good poem. I agree with DrammaMomma that there are a few too many commas. But writing about writers block, well, it just dose not ...

I thought this poem was really cute. I did not understand why up underlined some lines and put arrows in front of others? But that's okay. Some of the rhymes ...

I like how you made happiness seem like it wasn't so great. Usually happiness is idealized as something perfect and everyone wants this perfect happiness. But you showed happiness as ...

I did not really understand this poem In the first line you say "this last poem is unfortunately the last" when i read it i was thinking, yes you just ...

I could feel the emotion in the poem so that's great. You always want the reader to feel emotion. In the second stanza in the second line where it says ...

The knot in a broken marriage part is very witty. I did not like how you rhymed extinct and linked but didn't rhyme anything else. I don't know if we ...

this poem lacks, emotion. Its just kind of words. I totally understand the story but i feel like asking "So what?". Maybe its because i have never had appendix pains. ...

Great poem! i like it a lot. I like the part about the pictures turning to sand in the hand. That was really neat. But, I thought this line was ...

This poem seems very emotional and its great to be opening up in poetry. My only critique is that in the 3rd stanza it would be better to rhyme alive ...

at first I did not really know what it was about. Im still not really sure what its about. But thats okay. I really liked the lines And we never ...

good poem! i like it alot. Some of the things you talk about i really understand, like the simple things mentioned (light bouncing off into your eyes). But since im ...

i really like it but i don't know. i don't really understand the poem that well. I didnt get what you were driving at to me it seemed like words. ...

amazing!!! only one thing really bothered me was when you wrote I mean, my apartment was. Clothing was scattered all about my room i like how the narrator is catching ...

it was good. i liked the repetition but the main parts of each stanza switched around alot. you seemed to be talking about a bunch of different things rather then ...