Published November 22, 2008
-Shush, come on, don’t talk so loudly.
>Just see the way she struts. Urgh, so proudly.
-I can’t stand the way she bosses me around.
>Hey, I can’t hear you, not a sound!
>Why are you whispering? Nobody’s here.
-If she hears me talk about her, that’s what I fear.
>You don’t like her too? But, on the surface...
-Yeah, I’m just pretending, Grace.
Everyone does it, once in awhile.
There’s no harm, to give it a trial.
They won’t hear what you have to say,
Regardless if it’s serious, or just a play.
Gossip, is gossiping behind someone’s back.
If you’re heard, you’ll get strangled by the neck.
Watch your words, watch them with care,
Say it to her face, if you dare.
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I thought this poem was really cute.
I did not understand why up underlined some lines and put arrows in front of others? But that's okay.
Some of the rhymes seemed force. Usually with rhyming that happens. Its very hard to make rhyming sound effortless but when it does happen it sounds just right.
But it was good and i totally got the idea you were getting at.
keep writing!
Hahaha nice one lol you could have added the consequences of gossip maybe? dunno but overall nice general ideal well played out.