Published November 21, 2008
Happiness is a fleeting shadow,
Trying to dull the pain of everyday life,
but unable to cover up the
vast quantities of pain and anguish
that seems to envelope the world.
The notion of a perfect world
leaves many ensnared in a abyss full
of dreamers, just like themselves,
making it so much easier for depression
to sneak under thin blankets and pull a
mind back into harsh reality.
When the Cheshire cat appears, he leaves
only a fading smile alone with
Alice in her own little dreamland,
to be forsaken by all and captured
by the card soldiers of a minds restrictions,
trying to impose their own view of happiness.
And yet we all live for happiness,
for its warm embrace that makes us feel
accepted in a cold, harsh society.
Like a harvest moon in the bitter autumn nights,
bringing light and hope to those in shadows
Happiness is a sick disease,
bringing peace and hope in a world where
neither exists for more than a moment.
A fleeting feeling condemning those unfortunate
to longing hearts and minds,
only to leaves them broken
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Hi!
I like this stanza. It's beautiful and it's true. I love the thought behind this, it's almost like floating, but still getting from A to B. I also like the idea of the world getting envelopped by pain and anguish.
Wow. This was a very good poem. I love it how the every stanza is like a one little thought. They could even work alone, but of course, they're much more powerful together.
The Alice in Wonderland reference was lovely; partly because I watched the movie just today.
This is actually the only part that I didn't like very much. Too many long words stuffed together. But actually it's quite funny, when you say it aloud. Hehe. It just stands out too much, maybe replace some of the words?
Overall, an enjoyable read. Keep up!
Demeter xxx
I like how you made happiness seem like it wasn't so great. Usually happiness is idealized as something perfect and everyone wants this perfect happiness. But you showed happiness as something negative rather than a positive, which I thought was really neat.
Keep writing!