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Hmh. Well. There are some good parts and some bad parts and overall it needs a lot of work, but it has potential to be very good so dont give ...

Well nuts to you Incandescence. Personally, I like Shakespeare, but only when I'm studying the plays. I like going into depth and looking at overall theme and stuff. Its a ...

Forgive me for my lack of enthusiasm, but I have to say my response to this poem is basically, well, BLAH. Wulie, so far I've read quite a bit of ...

Meh. Just...meh. I'm sure you're sick of hearing this, but it needs depth, it needs needs revision. Dont get me wrong, I'm not saying its a bad poem. It has ...

This poem definitely has potential CarsandGuitars. There are some revisions that should be made but the premise is great. Somewhere back in the past, I remember that I met you. ...

I agree with Firestarter about those two points. Nice question, but the second 'like' has to go. Also, its a good poem, but it kind of....just....stops. Dead. Like, nowhere to ...

Well I dont think theres anything I can critique about this poem. Its awesome. Definitely haunting - chilling, even. I like the dark undertones despite the seeming innocence (a well-chosen ...

Personally I found it read as a song, which isnt altogether a bad thing. If I were you'd I'd set it to music as is...kind of a country western song, ...

Yay for you, nicklepickle! You've improved a great deal and for that I commend you heartily. A little bit of constructive criticism - She floats from place to place, Living ...

Well, there's definitely potential in here, but I personally felt you talked too much in some parts, if you know what I mean. Silence can often speak louder than words ...

I have to say I agree with Incandescence and Sam here. No offense, but - well - there isnt anything there, you know? There is no emotion, or if there ...

Sorry guys, but I'm with Incandescence on this. Been there, done that, its all been plastered over the TV screen several billion times...we dont want to hear it again! Frankly, ...

Again, its cool, but nothing we havent heard before. I get the impression you're just mouthing the words here, if you know what I mean. Using borrowed images for something ...

I definitely agree with Brian. Its good, and the metaphor (or is that analogy?) is excellent. It does, however, have some niggly bits; Even as I fear that a soundtrack ...

I want to first congratulate you on the way you're handling all of our criticism. I dont know if I could take it with such equanimity, so kudos to you. ...