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Whee! Patronizing much? Sorry :shock: but I'd hate to get critiques like that. :lol: Unfortunately though, I've gotta agree on the basics. This is a pretty novice poem - good, ...

Well, I liked it. Personally, the first few lines (which seem to be the subject of much controversy here, LMAO) were what made it for me. I think people are ...

For some reason, this song really, well, "hit" me, lol. I love it, particularly the last line. Excellent delivery. The only bit that irks me a little is the first ...

Hey innerbeauty, welcome to YWS. Hope you're enjoying the site so far. As regards your poem: I can definitely see where you're coming from here, and I like the way ...

Warning, warning, frankness ahead! Armor on? OK, good. Here we go. To start with, I love the first two stanzas. They have a great rhythm and a sense of freshness, ...

I have to agree. The ending needs more punch- it kind of dwindles away. Maybe if you either add another stanza or alter the ones you already have to add ...

Spectacular. I almost tripped up on the line breaks in the second stanza (maybe you could smooth those out a little) but after that I was hooked. Loved it. Particularly ...

Hehe thats actually really sweet (no pun intended) and quite clever. It does need some work IMHO, but it tickles me for some reason. Anyways, some suggestions: If you were ...

Um...well, I am left speechless, since evryone else has already said and re-said anything I could possibly say, LOL. Anyway, this is the first thing I've read and critiqued on ...

Hey Areida; I read this a while back and thought I had critiqued, but apparently not. Hmm. Note to self: Must upgrade memory. But, seriously now folks, I think Sam ...

The message in itself is lovely, and the poem (although, gotta say, it is a tiny bit cliche) is very sweet. I'm no grammar queen so I cant really help ...

That would be interesting, Sam- if (as I think a lot of us suspect) Harry is the seventh Horcrux, and if he kills Voldemort without realizing he is the final ...

I loved this. I kind of think the beginning is a bit blah - needs spicing up a bit maybe. It doesnt seem to have the right rhythm for the ...

Woo, snotty post! :shock: Tut tut! [-X **cough** Sorry, but yeah. You're entitled to your opinion, I just feel compelled to say that you were a bit sharp - unnecessarily ...

**points** What they said. LOL I loved this. I read it through - becoming slightly irritated with the staring person, I will admit -and then I got to "he blinked" ...