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Re: Nothing.
Hey Mandrake! Alright, it's about time you did a short story again. I like your short stories, especially the dark ones full of morbid humor, which this short also contains ...
Feb 7, 2014 -
Re: Silence
Hey Sophie! I'll start off with welcoming you to YWS! I hope you enjoy yourself. There's not too much I would comment on, so it won't be a lengthy review. ...
Feb 5, 2014 -
Re: Abortion
Hey Knight! Your mother sounds annoying ;) Alright, I do have things I could comment on in this essay, so I'll head into it: And this was not written to ...
Jan 28, 2014 -
Re: Honeymoon in Mars-Episode9(A day to Gamble at Articus Base 2)
Hey Rikki! Returning to this series one last time to take a look at what is so far your final chapter. As I said when I originally began reviewing this ...
Jan 26, 2014 -
Re: Honeymoon in Mars-Episode8(The conspiracy at Articus Base 1)
Hey Rikki! Soon done now, we're at Chapter eight. And after this many chapters, your format is finally starting to take form. The dialogue is written decently, the pacing is ...
Jan 26, 2014 -
Re: Honeymoon in Mars-Episode7(The Articus Voyage - Part3 - Decode the Code)
Hey Rikki! Back again for Chapter seven. I really don't get this chapter, so I'll just make a quick review, as I have now gone through all of them so ...
Jan 26, 2014 -
Re: Honeymoon in Mars - Episode6(The Articus Voyage - Part2 - Black Hawk Down)
Hey Rikki! Back for Chapter seven and part two of the voyage. Just like before, I won't mention every recurring error and I'll be heading straight into it: Okay, like ...
Jan 26, 2014 -
Re: Honeymoon in Mars - Episode5(The Articus Voyage - Part1 - Fantastic Start)
Hey Rikki! Lets continue with chapter five! Alright now, I'm going to quote a certain meme here; Son, I am disappoint. Your last chapter was a lot better written, mainly ...
Jan 26, 2014 -
Re: Honeymoon in Mars - Episode4(The Romantic Drunkyard)
Hey Rikki! Continuing where I left off at chapter three, and I can already tell that chapter four is quite an improvement. In this chapter you have finally shed your ...
Jan 26, 2014 -
Re: Honeymoon in Mars - Episode3(Our Heroes at Miami)
Hey Rikki! Back for chapter three. As with previous chapters I'll just jump straight into it: Well, it seems like this might be the last chapter where you write dialogue ...
Jan 26, 2014 -
Re: Princesses Anonymous
Hey Lucrezia! I guess I should start off with a belated welcome to YWS! Should probably have done that before you became review Queen, or should I say Princess, of ...
Jan 26, 2014 -
Re: Honeymoon in Mars - Episode2(The Road to Articus)
Hey Rikki! I'm sorry it took me so long to continue this series, however, I finally got around to it again. I'll be going through them quickly and I have ...
Jan 26, 2014 -
Re: Sinking, Sinking, There Goes My Sanity
Hey Mandrake! I gotta say, I really like how active you have become lately. I love your dark and 'offbeat' style of writing, it's something I don't read too often ...
Jan 22, 2014 -
Re: Pokemon Egx(Chapter 2)
Hey Kalder! Back for chapter two. I'll write as I go along: Daniel eyed Serena questioningly. Okay, we're off to a confusing start here. At the end of your last ...
Jan 20, 2014 -
Re: Pokemon Egx(Chapter 1)
Hey Kalder! I'll be doing a quick review of your first chapter before heading into your second. Alright, this was really disturbing. Not really how I envisioned a Pokemon fanfic ...
Jan 20, 2014