barefootrunner

Okay, I'm back! You have a few problems such as grammatical struggles, underdeveloped characters and a lagging plot. This time, to help, I've got a list of quick tips to ...

Hi there! Okay, let's go for it, then! Firstly, you need a lot of work on where you put your commas and full stops. Look at this: I loaded my ...

Hiya! barefootrunner here to review your poem :) Good job for your first forage into free verse! Spelling and grammar: Good! There is just one part of the poem that ...

Hi there, MRHILL92, and welcome to YWS! barefootrunner here today to review your piece :) So, firstly spelling and grammar: You tended to use a lot of pedantic words to ...

Hi there! Is it me again? Of course it is! Now get out there and post the next chapter so I can come back again! So spelling, grammar, plot and ...

Hi there! Another review from barefootrunner to cheer up your day :) Okay, so spelling, grammar, plot and characters are all much the same as before. But I can sometimes ...

Hi there! barefootrunner here for... Yes, another review! I'll leave out spelling, grammar and pacing problems, because you know what I have to say already, but let's look at a ...

Hi there! barefoot here to review AGAIN! You might be tired of me going through the motions, but here I go again: Spelling and grammar: Exactly the same. Logic: Very ...

Hi there! Back for more! I'm gonna read all the way through your entire novel! Keep it up. Spelling and grammar: The same as before. Check up on direct speech, ...

Okay, so I'm back :) barefootrunner here to review again! Spelling and grammar: Not much more to say, still check out your dialogue and watch the capitalisation. Logic: Sometimes you ...

Hi there! barefootrunner back to review! You make your readers salivate! Seriously, you have great talent for light, witty and action-packed prose. You'd better keep writing... ;) Spelling and grammar

Hi there! barefootrunner here to review your piece :) Welcome to YWS! Spelling and grammar: Okay, you need some work here. You need to look up direct speech especially. Not ...

Hi there! YWS is cool, isn't it? Welcome! So firstly, spelling, grammar and punctuation: A doll is what he maade me to be made, not maade. To be caged and ...

Hi there! barefootrunner here to review your poem! Let's get straight to the spelling, grammar and punctuation: litering the ground with white. littering. and proceeds to lay on the grave ...

Hi there! I'm here to review your piece. Firstly, welcome to YWS! Now, I loved the simplicity of your poem! It is really refreshing! Spelling, grammar and punctuation: Spelling was ...