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The girl: It doesn’t matter anymore. It ended when you walked through that door. You made me cry [Many times, The only comfort I found, Was in weeping through the ...

Woah! Such deep emotion you got here! Its amazing! Your work that is...I'm speechless as to describe it...its just awesome!! (hows that??) Anyways, what i like most about it, is ...

Hey there. Looks like this poem is quite popular for its criticism. I have to agree with StoryWeaver, this poem holds so much potential if only you gave it that ...

Very nice. Once again. :) And yet, once again you left out some stuff...:) but that's okay. The over all story is very interesting, and understandible. Nice work. Again. :) ...

Very nice and very interesting. There are a few errors in your sentences, mostly just leaving out words. And I think the people above me have already pointed them out. ...

I agree that there are some people who act stupid and not as "intelligent" as you are, but if you think about it, they have just not encountered the same ...

Very good point. And i believe that it is worth the wait (as you put in your poem). It is very well put, and honest. I like it. :) Keep ...

Wow!! First of all, I love your avatar. lol Second, I really like this poem! I can see it in my head as i read it.{then again i think thats ...

Well, if it is your first time writing, as Elinor had said, then you did well. But it would be better if it was put into stanzas 'cause then you ...

Well, I must say I love the first verse. It -like others have said- made me want to read more. That would be one awesome world. (: And even though ...

Hey, I think this is pretty good. I admit it is kind of depressing, but I've read alot of depressing poems. So yaah I guess its best that not all ...

Very nice. Very descriptive. Very good!! ha ha....I don't think those thoughts would've crossed my mind in describing the sky, but you made it work. :) Keep up the good ...

Honestly I'm not a good critique at all... but I am for sure that this piece is amazing... there could be changes as the others above me have already said.... ...

Very interesting...:) and well I'm not the best critique all! but i like this...:) keep it up..

I thought it was Horton not Hector. Ha, but about the poem....its really nice. It has the best description of the rainy season I've ever read. Dang! Well considering I ...