arspoetica

i agree, short poetry is very difficult to write, and you did a nice job here. I disagree, however, with the need for punctuation. I only got to read it ...

I think you have a very strong idea for a poem here, but I feel that your execution needs a little bit of work. I only noticed one major grammatical ...

The only mistake i noticed that hasn't been mentioned already was in the beginning, Fingers assaulted by the cold, he turned the lock hearing the mechanical click. It should probably ...

This one touched me personally, seeing as i am the laziest person i have ever met. You did a really nice job at making something thats so normal to most ...

That was a very eery, but amazing poem at the same time! I only have one possible recommendation for something to change. Say 'sleep tight,' And don't be afraid. Don't ...

I really like the imagery you use in this poem. It was all very strong and really held the poem together. There is only one thing I would recommend thinking ...

I love this poem! Some parts lacked some imagery, but others had strong imagery. There is only a couple things i would change. I called your name a million times, ...

Amazing if I must say so myself! (And i must) I wasn't sure what to make of the poem until the very end, and it added a sort of strange ...

First off, title works just fine. Second, you've written a very lovely poem here. Know for some criticism! One thing i noticed is that at the end of every line, ...

I hate doing this, but i have to disagree with Confetti. I feel the two closing lines flowed fine, and personally I really like those lines. Never have truer words ...

Well done for doing this quickly. First off, however, the I think the title should change to "The Sirens play the Sailors a Tune." Just lose the S on the ...

I like how you're trying something new by structuring your poem, and i only have a couple things to say about changes. But I've turned around once again. Your memories ...

This poem had amazingly strong imagery, and your diction was beautiful. The only thing i think is a mistake is churn engines, breathe with lungs of gasoline, I think you ...

Great job with this poem! I only noticed one mistake. You think you can do whatever you want it, right?" I don't think there should be an it after want ...

Amazing job with this poem! I didn't find anything i would change in this poem so well done! My favorite part wasn't actually a line, but the fact that you ...