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I think it's cool but it's not really a poem. Maybe a chorus or a beginning or something. At this point it's not really clear what it's about but it ...

Yeah, I love it. Especially the third stanza. I agree with most things Niteowl said, except I think the stains in the satin are showing in your face. Is fine. ...

I love this too! I like the bolded lines, I think they make it different. My favorite is the middle stanza. (Stanza? whatever. The part between "The clock still ticks." ...

Cool. I don't really see the point of it, but who says poems need a point? I like it, especially the last stanza and "She plays guitar horribly, And dances ...

Yay! Hmmm... I like Rose Daughter better I think but whatever. Doesn't reading the last pages spoil the ending if you do decide to buy it? That's cool though. I'm ...

No Rivergirl, I seriously doubt you're ok. Everybody else, I realize it's not much of a poem. I wrote it on the spur of the moment when I was feeling ...

Yeah, it's weird, but I liked it for some reason. I liked the 'What a weird day.' line. I have no idea why it's so cool, but it definitely is. ...

I like "Mars is bright" better. But maybe that's just me. Does it have some significance? Anyway, it sounds great in my opinion.

crap. That is seriously amazing. I like how it's kind of choppy, it seems really intense. I like the images of breaking dishes and tunnels and blood in the night. ...

Ooh, I like it. please write more. It's funny and I like Ted. There's a few typos, maybe you should read through it once more. Good job though. :)

I liked it alot. The last two lines were really beautiful.

I like it. You need an a in breath though. Especially the first four lines were really cool.

Great. Me likes. Maybe it's the style, but I think you need periods in a couple places. Particularly at the very end. But overall, beautiful.

wow, I really liked this. I loved the words in parenthesis and how it was really fast and urgent. It was powerful and almost raw or something. Great job.

Wow, that's really good. Very descriptive. Is this part of a story? Because if it is you should post more. Great job. :D