Young Writers Society

Tagging in the District.
Waiting for assistance.
Police Cars in the Distance.
Tagging in the District.

So from the comments that I read on this piece, none of which were counted as reviews, which I'm finding pretty funny. I hope that perhaps this poem thing got legit reviews in the decade in which it was written, but here I am now. So from the comments, the main complaint I heard was about their lack of understanding. I mean I can understand this perspective but I was very surprised by the lack of bs review interpretations, which would have felt more appropriate for the situation.

I saw in your author's notes that it was listed as your first poem, and even though I don't really believe that point, why not give you the benefit of the doubt? This actually looks more like it was designed to purposely troll the population reading it. Maybe I've just been hanging around yws poetry forums too long if I'm starting to expect that from everyone. Or maybe I just need to hang around a bit longer...

If I deal with this like it was a legit poem, my first thought would be about the political side of this piece. Pretty much anything that involves a mention of graffitti and/or the police department, it ends up being political. There's just no way to get around all of that with all of the connotation that's attached to those two things. Marking up buildings is always in protest of something and considering what the population of yws is, I can make a pretty fair bet on that point.

You can keep this solid as a short poem but you either need to add on a bit more or change what you have so far. I'm actually a fan of repeating the first line at the very bottom, so this would lead me more into a recommendation for extending the poem. With all the ideas you're working with, it shouldn't be that hard to add on like two or three lines to give some actual substance to the content. I feel the beginning of something with this and having written a fair bit of troll poetry, I'm rolling with that as the eventual meaning for this piece.

There's hope in this.
Happy Halloween.
- lizz