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  • Poetry » Dramatic, Romantic Re: I Love You Still

    Hey, Annie here for a review. This was so sad! I can feel the narrator's hope that some day she will once again see her love but at the same ...

    Apr 22, 2016
  • Short Story » Health, Realistic Re: Remember

    Hey, Annie here for a review. First off, grammar/punctuation: I would recommend that you break up you paragraphs just a little bit more. Also when you said, "exercision," did you ...

    Apr 22, 2016
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Story of My Father

    This story was very interesting and had a unique plot, there were just a few problems I found: I don't quite understand the analogy here,"I dash to mother’s room as ...

    Mar 12, 2016
  • Short Story » Horror, Supernatural Re: A Straw Man On Rolling Tides

    Hey Annie here for a review! I loved this story! You had so many vivid descriptions and the gruesome deaths of the characters were so well written. And I wonder ...

    Mar 12, 2016
  • Short Story » Horror, Other Re: A Test of Will

    Annie here for a review! :) First off, I love the imgaery you used in the beginning, especially the line, "entombed in frost until spring washed them from their graves." ...

    Mar 11, 2016
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Horror Re: Chased

    Hey there, Annie here for a review. There were a few grammar issues, but not too many. Where you wrote, "should increase my pass" I think you meant, "should increase ...

    Feb 2, 2016
  • Short Story » Narrative, Horror Re: Sink

    Hey, Annie here for a review! I really only noticed three mistakes with the grammar. First one: "The cars rush by on her right, the stores only vaguely interest her ...

    Feb 2, 2016
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, General Re: The Monster Under My Bed

    Hey, Annie here for a review! I may do a little nitpicking, but mostly grammar stuff. In the second sentence you said "Ever so often he" but I think you ...

    Jan 16, 2016
  • Short Story » Narrative, Romantic Re: Snowed In

    Hey, Annie here for a review! I may do a little nitpicking in some parts, but I hope it helps you. My first suggestion is to make sure that you ...

    Nov 25, 2015
  • Short Story » Horror, Realistic Re: A Stormy Night(mare)

    Hey there, Annie here for a review! :) First I want to say that I absolutely love it when writers use the word "cacophony" so when you used it, it ...

    Oct 25, 2015
  • Short Story » Horror, Dramatic Re: Tap. Tap.

    Annie here for a review, and welcome to YWS! :) First I want to say that I really liked the beginning paragraph, with the repetition of I don't know." Though ...

    Oct 25, 2015
  • Short Story » Culture, Realistic Re: School Life -- Part One

    Hey, Annie here for a review! This was very interesting, and i really like how you gave both the point of view of a popular person and the point of ...

    Sep 28, 2015
  • Short Story » Realistic, Dramatic Re: A Product Of Circumstances!

    Hey! Annie here for a review! :) In this sentence ,"I was excited about everything a student of VI grade would be of," first (unless it's important to how your ...

    Sep 22, 2015
  • Short Story » Romantic, Dramatic Re: High school Romance

    Hey, Annie here for a (hopefully helpful) review! I didn't really find any major errors, so any mistakes I see will just be me nitpicking the grammar. First (pretty minor) ...

    Sep 16, 2015
  • Short Story » Realistic, General Re: One More Second

    Hey, Annie here for a (hopefully helpful) review! At the beginning I was very curious, I was wondering why he was watching his daughter while she slept. Then as it ...

    Sep 16, 2015


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