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  • Poetry » Horror, Mystery / Suspense
    Re: Outside My Window

    A few comments on your poem. Not going to go line by line or anything, just a few comments 1) So very. Two things. One you used it twice. . ...

    Jan 24, 2014

  • Poetry » General, Narrative
    Re: remind me that i am alive

    Hello, and welcome to YWS! First of all, formatting! It makes your poetry a lot easier to read. So something like: Soaked in rain I ache for a contemplative thought ...

    Jan 23, 2014

  • Script » General, General
    Re: Forgetful.

    God I laughed so hard. It was Ok until the hospital. Then it was hilareous. Made me think what it must be like for those people. You had me hooked ...

    Jun 14, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Random

    I'm trying to depict what this means. I know that it is a random poem, but I can tell that it has meaning. I feel as if it is saying ...

    May 30, 2011

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: 0.

    Wow. Wow. owowow. Serious talent. So many times I see on here I read people who have no clue what they are doing ( I consider myself a step above ...

    Mar 28, 2011

  • Other » General, General
    Re: Procrastination

    Oh lord. I hate procrastination. It sucks. I find myself falling into it everyday. Half of the time with YWS (primarily the chat room, you guys are awesome). Sometimes in ...

    Mar 28, 2011

  • Script » General, General
    Re: The Huge Claw

    Im not to the review yet, but jus saying, because you were interested in Script Frenzy, this is not how scripts are set up. Check out the format on the ...

    Mar 28, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: Unpredictable.

    Hmmm. Very interesting *Strokes chin-beardy thingy*. I like the actual poem, I can say that upfront, but the formating is weird. It is obvious that the formating is different for ...

    Mar 28, 2011

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: The sight of you.

    Refrain. A pretty hard concept to grasp. So much so that I avoid using it altogether, but It still finds a way into my poetry. I think you did a ...

    Mar 27, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Japan

    My god this is terrible. How is this featured? It is obvious that you are completely under educated about the events that are occurring. 1) Your similes! What!? Ice cream ...

    Mar 16, 2011

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Arachnid

    Being arachniphobic, I really liked this poem, but I think that the ending could say "Then I squished you" but that thats my opinion. And that was sarcasm. Anyways, the ...

    Mar 13, 2011

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General
    Re: It was just one night.

    I see an attempt at making a fancy rhythm, but It did not work out quite well. Sure, it was a good poem, but the rhythm did more harm than ...

    Mar 13, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Indifference

    This poem really hit home. Even though there are some rhythm mistakes I can spot, they do not matter. They actually give the story a better feeling. But yes, I ...

    Mar 13, 2011

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General
    Re: Tomorrow

    Did you just seriously misspel tomorrow? That is really bad, noticing that it is the thread name, so ya. The rhythm isn't really hard. It is a little hard to ...

    Mar 13, 2011

  • Poetry » Other, General
    Re: Autmn Leaves

    How is a backwards 3rd letter obvious? Lol. I was searching for a minute straight, and I thought you were just pulling our tails. Then I saw I LOVE YOU ...

    Mar 12, 2011


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