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Re: Sidney's Children Meets Youtube~Chapter 3
I liked this. And considering I didn't read other two chapters before this, I am not completely utterly lost. Although could you shed a little light for me on why ...
Jun 19, 2014 -
Re: I'm an Ignoramous
I like the last four lines... lol. What does ignoramous mean by the way... I love the description in the second stanza, it totally relates to how I feel when ...
Jun 19, 2014 -
Re: Father To Daughter (Please Forgive Me)
This an interesting piece of work... I was just wondering if this is based off of personal experience or if it's just a random idea you had. If it's personal ...
Jun 19, 2014 -
Re: The Man with the Silver Crest
This has very awesome description! It was like a total plot twist for me when you said "hiding a women's breasts". I don't know if you meant for it to ...
Jun 19, 2014 -
Re: The Secret Service page #1
First off this is great but, here are some grammatical errors: 1) "...cloak hiding my faceand my dagger..." I do believe you meant to say "face and". But that is ...
Jun 18, 2014 -
Re: Why I'm not dead right now.
I love this, I am going to share this with my friend. She was feeling this way, and she might still be. I have all of her best intentions in ...
Jun 18, 2014 -
Re: Delete
This is amazing! I totally love it! The words in it are beautiful and hold the description together without making it fall apart in confusion. I love it when you ...
Jun 18, 2014 -
Re: The Feather Boy
THIS IS AMAZING! I love how real it is! I love how you compare the feather and him, and how true it is to some people's lives! I really want ...
Jun 16, 2014 -
Re: The Light
I like this! I seem like I have said this to a lot people today, but this kind of relates to the novel I am writing. This girl has a ...
Jun 16, 2014 -
Re: "An eye for an eye makes the whole world blind."
For some reason I feel like this is my life, if that makes sense... :D The last line "The world will turn", is a bit like my book. In my ...
Jun 16, 2014 -
Re: all white trucks are ice cream trucks
I like this! Although it is a bit confusing! This relates almost exactly to my childhood, which I am almost done with (I am 14). I like the line "Because ...
Jun 16, 2014 -
Re: Persona Non Grata
I was just wondering, but what does "Persona Non Grata" mean? Sorry if it's obvious or something... I love the rhyming on the third...paragraph? I don't really know what you ...
Jun 16, 2014 -
Re: Lustful stares.
This is beautiful! Well done! To start off there are a few grammatical errors such as in the sentence "You bed is full of a mound of clothes." I do ...
Jun 16, 2014 -
Re: The Future
Your title of "Dramatic", fits this piece very well. It is beautiful and has a certain flare I like. It is extremely dramatic, and that is one of my favorite ...
Jun 16, 2014 -
Re: Fred and George
This is good! Great job! Wait is this based off of Harry Potter, or not? I am a little confused at the title. The description and everything flowed amazingly and ...
Jun 8, 2014
