Twinkle4ever

Hey, I read your story. It was good except for a few gramatical mistakes. You need to put commas at some places while at others there need to be full ...

Very well said. I'm touched to the deepest corner of my heart. I've always longed to hear words like that. Now you've said it and it makes me feel better. ...

I like this short lyric poetry. I've never actually read a poem ABOUT a singing so this is my first and I really like it. Nice work with the rhyming ...

This one's a lot better than the last one. I was so mesmerized in this little short story. Although it was mostly a description of how the character feels, it ...

Hi! It's a really good poetry. And you've put in emotions. The title is very suitable and I like it. It's catchy! Leave me to bleed on my own; watch ...

Hello! Amazing poetry. The way you've described the fireworks is just amazing. And I love it that you've written 'seizures of color, explosions of light' repeatedly. :) It is not ...

I like the lines 'I won't love you forever, I want to love you today.' Although it can be changed to 'I'd rather love you today' if you like. But ...

Nicely said. At first the title of the poem had made me think it would be about a city or a country. But now that I've read the whole thing, ...

The title definitely suits the poem. There is a lot of emotion. The description is crystal clear about the person's feelings. Hatred is being reflected through the whole poem and ...

I really liked that short story of yours. It made my heart ache by just reading about all the pain and sadness the character is experiencing but that's just the ...

It was a short but sweet poetry. I liked the parts where you repeated the same line twice in one paragraph. You could have written a bit more but It's ...

The poem was quite interesting. I like the way you've written 'I want to be forever young' in every paragraph to emphasize it. In the very last line, 'when my ...

I really enjoyed reading this story. It's got me wondering what will happen next. It's so full of suspense and excitement. There were no gramatical mistakes that I could find. ...

I'm really touched deep down inside by your poetry. The emotions you've put into it just filled my eyes. I would suggest that you work more on the poetry than ...

I think the title you've chosen for the poem is perfect. It suits it. I really liked the part where you wrote 'A splash of bold colors' as in the ...