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Re: All alone, Once again
First things first! Welcome, newcomer. Welcome to the wonderful and crazy world of poetry, where anything goes, where we can create whole worlds in stanzas, and destroy norms in a ...
Mar 2, 2024 -
Re: when my mother stabbed me
Hello! Timeless Mage here with a review! General Impressions/the gist of the poem The speaker, (whom I am going to assume is female) got stabbed in the back by her ...
Jan 25, 2024 -
Re: Blank Blank Blank
Hey there! Timeless Mage here with a review! I really like how this conveys the random train of thought that you get when you can't think of anything- like grasping ...
Jan 20, 2024 -
Re: Not like the movies
Hey there, Timeless Mage here with another review! Overall, this is a fantastic piece! I usually try to find something that needs work in works, and the only think that ...
Jan 19, 2024 -
Re: Sofie and Freyja
Hey there! Timeless Mage here to leave a review. This is a lovely short story. I always enjoy it when stories get to smudge the edges of reality like this ...
Jan 11, 2024 -
Re: The Sun's Answer
Hi, Timeless Mage here to leave a review! First thoughts and impressions: I enjoyed reading this! It reads very much like a love letter from the sun to the moon, ...
Jan 9, 2024 -
Re: puzzle pieces replace my memories (collection)
Hey there! Here to leave a review. Sleepwalking to my demise The line breaks make this feel very choppy, which makes it very hard to read, almost like the speaker ...
Dec 29, 2023 -
Re: Pretty
I like this, It really speaks to the intense belief that outside validation is what we need, only to find that it really, truly, sounds fake. The intense longing of ...
Dec 21, 2023 -
Re: Cyclical Hunger
This is great! The repetition of stanzas made this a really enjoyable read. I didn't understand why you repeated the stanzas until I thought about Ouroboros. The stanza "the serpent ...
Nov 16, 2023 -
Re: What Your Words Taught Me
Hey there! I really liked that you followed a rhyme scheme. Not many people (Unfortunately, even myself) use one when writing poetry in more free-form or simple stanzas. I also ...
Nov 16, 2023 -
Re: something i wrote bored in History class...
This is a great descriptive piece. The only thing bad about it is the choppiness of the sentences. Overall, it's pretty good for variety of language, and the words you ...
Aug 23, 2023 -
Re: The Legend of the Black Bull
I love this! A few critiques though: First off, the last line, "Did you stand with Sadoria, or with its enemies will you fall" has a very confusing tense change, ...
Aug 23, 2023 -
Re: Reencarnacion
I love this piece, especially the last line "and every writers suffer from different war". Overall, I would say that this piece is still in its design stages. Things like ...
Aug 23, 2023
