In the realm of dreams where love appears,
How easy it seemed to banish fears.
He was the script, she was the lead,
How easy to trust his words, indeed.
How simple it was, the tender touch,
To feel the magic, oh, how much!
In moonlit scenes, they danced so free,
How easy love was meant to be.
How effortless it was to believe,
He'd never go, he'd never deceive.
Promises whispered, soft and sweet,
How easy for hearts to skip a beat.
How perfect it felt, their love story,
In sunsets and in morning glory.
He was the melody, she was the song,
How easy it was to belong.
But as the reel of life continued to roll,
How hard the truth began to unfold.
Love wasn't a script, neatly confined,
How hard reality was to find.
How challenging it was, the tears she'd weep,
As illusions shattered, emotions steep.
He was the actor, she played the fool,
How hard it is to navigate love’s cruel rule.
How heavy the weight of deceit's disguise,
As trust crumbled beneath love's skies.
He was the echo of a fading song,
How hard it was to admit she was wrong.
How harshly the winds of heartache blew,
Through shattered dreams that once they knew.
Love wasn't a fairy tale, pristine,
How hard it was to wipe the slate clean.
How deeply she'd loved, now torn apart,
A masterpiece shattered, a broken heart.
He was the director, orchestrating pain,
She was the actor confine to a contract of his gain.
In the reel of love, the scenes did change,
From how easy to how hard, a poignant exchange.
She found love wasn't like the movies,
But a script of heartaches and bruises.
Hey there, Timeless Mage here with another review!
Overall, this is a fantastic piece! I usually try to find something that needs work in works, and the only think that I could think of was that the last two stanzas don't end in "How hard...". Other than that, I found this was a fantastic depiction of a tough (as avianwings48 puts it) reality check.
I think that my favorite line was "He was the director, orchestrating pain,", mainly because of the incredibly powerful imagery attached with this, the word 'director' implying that this was intended.
Keep it up, fantastic writer! We create these worlds not for the sake of others, but the worlds and characters themselves.
Thank you for the kind words Mage, I'm glad you enjoyed!
Hi, Cupid! Another lovely poem from you, yet again!
I love the concept of this poem, and I feel you captured its essence in such an elegant and heartbreaking way. You created a nice contrast by starting with a lovely romance, then snatching it away as the narrator realizes that her love was "not like the movies." This story also tells a tale of unrequited love, which can be just as earth-shattering as a harsh reality check.
As I was reading, I noticed that in the first four stanzas, all the last lines started with "How easy," and in the next four stanzas, the last line started with "How hard." This created such a beautiful juxtaposition and was also a clever use of repetition. (I am a huge sucker for repetition in poetry!)
Favorite lines!
I love the metaphor in the first line, especially since it follows the rest of your theme! It allowed for nice imagery, as well.
Again, the use of going from "how easy" to "how hard" is such a unique and clever way to show repetition, and this line feels very elegant!
A place for improvement:
As much as I love this line, it felt slightly awkward with the flow of the rest of the piece. Other than that, I felt this was a very strong poem!
All in all, I love this poem. You have a unique writing style and a knack for good rhymes. Your use of repetition and contrast worked great with the message you wanted to convey, and it told a story that pulled at my heartstrings.
Can't wait to see your next work! -Avian
Couldn't delete the comment... but here's the same exact review! (In actual review form this time)
Haha! I get to say thank you twice >:D
Hi, Cupid! Another lovely poem from you, yet again!
I love the concept of this poem, and I feel you captured its essence in such an elegant and heartbreaking way. You created a nice contrast by starting with a lovely romance, then snatching it away as the narrator realizes that her love was "not like the movies." This story also tells a tale of unrequited love, which can be just as earth-shattering as a harsh reality check.
As I was reading, I noticed that in the first four stanzas, all the last lines started with "How easy," and in the next four stanzas, the last line started with "How hard." This created such a beautiful juxtaposition and was also a clever use of repetition. (I am a huge sucker for repetition in poetry!)
Favorite lines!
I love the metaphor in the first line, especially since it follows the rest of your theme! It allowed for nice imagery, as well.
Again, the use of going from "how easy" to "how hard" is such a unique and clever way to show repetition, and this line feels very elegant!
A place for improvement:
As much as I love this line, it felt slightly awkward with the flow of the rest of the piece. Other than that, I felt this was a very strong poem!
All in all, I love this poem. You have a unique writing style and a knack for good rhymes. Your use of repetition and contrast worked great with the message you wanted to convey, and it told a story that pulled at my heartstrings.
Can't wait to see your next work! -Avian
Now realizing I accidentally forgot to click "this is a review" 0-0
Evening Avian! Thank you for the review, I'm glad you enjoyed my poem haha. Also I think you can delete your comment, if you want you can just c&p and post it as a review? Or leave it how it is, whatever you want to do