Tikaya

Good morning! Here for chapter 2 :3 I kinda wish you would have added the actual Czech word here: “Yeah,” Stan’s youngest son said in Czech, XD Huhhh okay I ...

Ohh I like how these breaks in the sentence gives the story a sort of poetry vibe? Like here: A scream that carried pain and suffering. I do think that ...

Hi hello and good morning! What a lovely chapter you have posted here :3 I am not rly sure about the “like a dead tree stump” right in the beginning. ...

Good morning! Let’s head straight into ch2, shall we? I think it is great that you highlighted which narrator is responsible for which section! That works very well! That said, ...

Good afternoon Creeper! Decided to jump in with Rosemary while high on coffee. Let’s do this! They were her friends and Valentina Love the exclusions XD Very “my friends and ...

Good morning Creeper! Felt like reading more about Samatha so here I am :3 Alright and right of the bat I feel like you don’t really have to repeat “sister” ...

A/N: The chapter would be way cooler to read if you play the music mentioned in the chapter while reading it: hmmm That said, a stellar opening sentence! But that ...

Ahh more Perdita, let’s go! Hmmm a long, gray bar, with strange scribblings on it, nothing like the art Perdita remembered. I don’t rly know it comes across what she’s ...

Hi hello and welcome! I’m here as a member of the Afterwatch to check out your Short Story :3 I like the idea of the correct breathing technique (maybe in ...

Onto Chapter 2 …why doesn’t this one have a name attached? Or does that mean we are still in Raven’s POV? Also also why didn’t you publish ch1, 2 and ...

Morning Catz ^^ Have come to read your new story! Alrighty! So, your very first sentence has a bit too many adjectives and adverbs so I suggest cutting some and ...

Good morning Vic! I’m here for the Afterwatch, ofc, but also because I like essays—at least this sounds like an essay even if you sorted it under Short Story? Let’s ...

Ah I dont rly mind the centered and bold thing, but like rev alluded to: I do mind the everything-is-in-the-same-paragraph thing :) Hia I have come here as a member ...

Good morning! Am here for chapter 3 and for the Afterwatch ~ Hmmm wait, does Vesna work Saturdays? Or why is Anaka taking care of Sen on Saturday? (ok so ...

Hia and good morning! I came here in my duties as the Afterwatch to check out your short story! First of all I like the stream of consciousness you've got ...