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Re: I love you, mom
Legacy here for review. I like the simplicity of this poem, but it seems emotionless. I would like to see some examples of how you showed her love or vise ...
May 15, 2017 -
Re: Sasha (A Poem)
Legacy here for a review. I like the content of this poem. I haven't seen a poem written about this topic in the way that you have written it. There ...
May 12, 2017 -
Re: Sonata of Your Afterglow
Legacy here for a review. I like the content of your lyrics, but the average person wouldn't understand your vocabulary. If you are trying to get the approval of the ...
May 12, 2017 -
Re: My Moon, My Man
Legacy here for a review. In the last line of your first stanza you have some empty adverbs that need to be removed for the flow to be better. They ...
May 12, 2017 -
Re: The felling of betrayal
Legacy here for a review. I love the content of this poem, but there are some things that need some improvement before this is a final draft. You seem to ...
May 12, 2017 -
Re: Cassadiss
Legacy here for a review. Honestly, this reminds me of some older slim shady (good job, I love slim). I love the pacing you seem to have here and I ...
May 11, 2017 -
Re: what i never said...
Legacy here for a review. I love how you read it and the structure it has in written form. It sounds like you really experienced something like this, and the ...
May 11, 2017 -
Re: La mort est belle; Part III - She saw me coming up the stairs
Legacy here for a review. I love the content. It's about a girl and the narrator; the narrator is trying to help the girl because of some reason and the ...
May 10, 2017 -
Re: She treats me through the night (blues)
Legacy here for a review. This sounds good. You have your rhyme scheme set up nicely and your verses set up perfectly (in my opinion). "I've been working to get ...
May 10, 2017 -
Re: please stay
Legacy here for a review. I immediately read the bolded words first and I am glad that they made a statement on their own. Reading the bold first helped me ...
May 10, 2017 -
Re: dIOrama of a Magical reigndeer's Broadcast
Legacy here for a review. I will leave out how I feel about the capitalization and awkward phrases per your author's note. It was very hard to follow this poem. ...
May 9, 2017 -
Re: Icarus
Legacy here for a review. I will start with your questions and then add some input of my own. 1. The structure of this poem is organized by content and ...
May 9, 2017 -
Re: Great Nemesis in the Comfort Room
Legacy here for a review. Some spots in this poem you intended to have a rhyme but fell short, such as when you say golden and darken. Those don't rhyme ...
May 9, 2017 -
Re: Fiddle me Rrich-o'c`het
Legacy here for a review. The use of symbols is confusing for me, but if it is for your style, then not everyone has to like it. Just keep in ...
May 8, 2017 -
Re: 5.8.17 Kiss
Legacy here for a review. I love the story that is being told here; of a girl taking a risk and attempting to kiss the boy that she loves even ...
May 8, 2017
