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  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: I love you, mom

    Legacy here for review. I like the simplicity of this poem, but it seems emotionless. I would like to see some examples of how you showed her love or vise ...

    May 15, 2017
  • Poetry » General, Lyrical Re: Sasha (A Poem)

    Legacy here for a review. I like the content of this poem. I haven't seen a poem written about this topic in the way that you have written it. There ...

    May 12, 2017
  • Lyrics » Realistic, Other Re: Sonata of Your Afterglow

    Legacy here for a review. I like the content of your lyrics, but the average person wouldn't understand your vocabulary. If you are trying to get the approval of the ...

    May 12, 2017
  • Poetry » Narrative, Romantic Re: My Moon, My Man

    Legacy here for a review. In the last line of your first stanza you have some empty adverbs that need to be removed for the flow to be better. They ...

    May 12, 2017
  • Other » Realistic, Other Re: The felling of betrayal

    Legacy here for a review. I love the content of this poem, but there are some things that need some improvement before this is a final draft. You seem to ...

    May 12, 2017
  • Lyrics » Dramatic, Lyrical Re: Cassadiss

    Legacy here for a review. Honestly, this reminds me of some older slim shady (good job, I love slim). I love the pacing you seem to have here and I ...

    May 11, 2017
  • Poetry » Romantic, Realistic Re: what i never said...

    Legacy here for a review. I love how you read it and the structure it has in written form. It sounds like you really experienced something like this, and the ...

    May 11, 2017
  • Poetry » Mystery / Suspense, Romantic Re: La mort est belle; Part III - She saw me coming up the stairs

    Legacy here for a review. I love the content. It's about a girl and the narrator; the narrator is trying to help the girl because of some reason and the ...

    May 10, 2017
  • Lyrics » Lyrical, Narrative Re: She treats me through the night (blues)

    Legacy here for a review. This sounds good. You have your rhyme scheme set up nicely and your verses set up perfectly (in my opinion). "I've been working to get ...

    May 10, 2017
  • Poetry » Romantic, Romantic Re: please stay

    Legacy here for a review. I immediately read the bolded words first and I am glad that they made a statement on their own. Reading the bold first helped me ...

    May 10, 2017
  • Poetry » Theatre, Spiritual Re: dIOrama of a Magical reigndeer's Broadcast

    Legacy here for a review. I will leave out how I feel about the capitalization and awkward phrases per your author's note. It was very hard to follow this poem. ...

    May 9, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Icarus

    Legacy here for a review. I will start with your questions and then add some input of my own. 1. The structure of this poem is organized by content and ...

    May 9, 2017
  • Poetry » Other, Humor Re: Great Nemesis in the Comfort Room

    Legacy here for a review. Some spots in this poem you intended to have a rhyme but fell short, such as when you say golden and darken. Those don't rhyme ...

    May 9, 2017
  • Poetry » Supernatural, Mystery / Suspense Re: Fiddle me Rrich-o'c`het

    Legacy here for a review. The use of symbols is confusing for me, but if it is for your style, then not everyone has to like it. Just keep in ...

    May 8, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, Romantic Re: 5.8.17 Kiss

    Legacy here for a review. I love the story that is being told here; of a girl taking a risk and attempting to kiss the boy that she loves even ...

    May 8, 2017


“Rise like Lions after slumber In unvanquishable number. Shake your chains to earth like dew Which in sleep had fallen on you— Ye are many—they are few.”
— Mary Shelly