TheStormAroundMe

Hello! I'm here to review! "Most races allow themselves to be slack in the greetings of others Right there you are a set of quotation marks that don't belong, thought ...

Wow, this was long. Still, I took it upon myself to read the whole thing. So let's get reviewing. In the beginning, all of the characters were introduced really fast. ...

Oh my gosh. This is a beautiful work of art. I have never read something so random, yet so beautiful. Just the fact that you paired a Radish with a ...

Hello! So, at the beginning you're giving times. I would use a colon instead of a period in between the numbers, because I first read them as nine and seven ...

Hello! I know this seems backwards, but I love your ending! It's like... I love you, but... and that's just beautiful I love it love it love it. Okay. That ...

Hello! I'm here to review your poem. Cereal is an interesting thing to compare to words, I must say. If the poem was trying to be heavy, then I suggest ...

This work really hits hard with me because my friend was diagnosed with depression this past year. After a lot of things happened, she ended up in a hospital a ...

Hello! So first of all, I think that the rhyming actually is cutsie and fun. This sounds a lot like a children's poem, something that belongs in a Shel Silverstein ...

I really like this poem. I don't know how to phrase that better. Maybe I like it because it can hard among groups of outcasts and rejects who just desperately ...

Hello, Ashkitten83! I have been brought here with a review chain to review this work! As a whole, I thought that it was very creative and thought out, but there ...

Hello! I'm here to review your story! So first of all, you have an okay plot. I don't think you have to fiddle around with that too much. However, you ...

I love how sad and haunting this poem is. It sort of reminds me of the beginning of the song, "The Awakening." It sort of slaps you in the face ...

Basically. You have captured the entire essence of being a writing in this one poem. "Songs seldom heard in our hectic universe." These are the most beautiful words. You've really ...

Hello! So I asked you what you wanted to be reviewed, and this is one thing that I haven't. Here are my thoughts. I am not looking at what other ...

Hi! I'm Grace, and I'm here to review your story! First of all, you have really huge info-dump paragraphs that you might want to split up. I have the same ...