Young Writers Society

Impressive. Really, really good poem. Your potential is startling, you know? The wording of the poem, the way you phrased the lines--they're dripping with expression. And you outlined "being a writer" really realistically. THUMBS UP.
Just punctuate the lines properly (i.e capitalize the letters t the start of each sentence, and add commas at the end of every other line) and this poem will be even better.

This stanza: " being a writer is a lifetime of working
for something that might never exist,
heeding the parts of you
that stubbornly insist
it will, it must,
and learning to trust those small voices" : It's the best in my book! It's painfully honest. Keep up the good work!

Mysticalxx

This is awesome! You just need to know that, okay? All right? Good.

Here for the promised review!

So, as I've said before, your vocabulary and flow are amazing. I especially love all the little rhymes in there. Usually when poets rhyme without having a rhyme scheme, it is jarring, but here it makes everything smoother.

Overall, there are not many problems. I just wanted to go through each verse and suggest little changes for better flow. In general, I think you are a bit wordy, so most of these will probably be suggestions to cut a word or two. These are just my thoughts, so feel free to completely ignore me if you don't like them!

Stanza One:
Good solid opening, love the rhyming.

being a writer is endless hours
staring at a glaring, white screen
and paper so clean,
imposing, taunting, mean,
and so full of impossible possibilities.

being a writer is stopping to listen
to the whispering of leaves
in their drifting descent to the earth,
their sighs in its soothing embrace,
(songs seldom heard in oura hectic universe)
and capturing the timbres with ink
in their grace.

being a writer is seeing what others cannot,
insightfully expressing our innermost workings,
hoping, praying they’ll understand,
because they deserve a chance
to perceive colors, seasons, stars, and such
in the same striking light as us.

being a writer is having sore hands
weathered from the creation of words ("worlds" would sound good as well - your pick)
we pluck from the depths of dynamic imaginations;
it’s dark circles under eyes
and the constant shifting of conceptual cogs,
whirring and (could leave it in, though) clicking truths into place.

In love with this poem

This is just....amazing ha ha. I love it!! It is very good and I do see all of that in myself and my friends who write. I like this poem a lot and it is a very good description of a writer. I also like the fact that you wrote about writers ha ha. Anyways best of luck to you and all writers out there!!!

Dear hermione315,

EccentricRose is here for to review!

I like how this poems starts out; mentioning the long hours of work. Because every writer knows, writing and editing is one of the most tedious tasks! And I can definitely relate to sore hands. lol (I broke both my wrists a few years back so now every word I write is painful. It can be very hard at times, especially when my inner-writer is at work and my wrists won't let me continue.)

This poem was well-written; any writer will agree to that! My favorite stanza is this:

"being a writer is seeing what others cannot,
insightfully expressing our innermost workings,
hoping, praying they’ll understand,
because they deserve a chance
to perceive colors, seasons, stars, and such
in the same striking light as us."

I find it brilliant! Though a lot of writers do see what others can see if they wanted to. Other people sometimes just aren't looking hard enough to find it! <3

I hope to see more of your work. This one is one of my favorites yet!

~Rose

Ohmygosh I love this poem. Your work just keeps getting better. I always look forward to your poems. I love how you use such simple language so beautifully.

Will be back to review later.

Hi there, Hermione! (Great name, by the way! )

Introduction:

IronSpark here to review your beautiful piece. This is my 75th review (3rd star) and I wanted it to be on something really special... so here we are.

READY? SET? GO!

Flow and Phrasing:

I'm going to do this stanza by stanza, if you don't mind.

being a writer is sometimes endless hours
staring at a glaring, white screen
and paper so clean,
imposing, taunting, mean,
and so full of impossible possibilities.

being a writer is stopping to listen
to the whispering of leaves
in their drifting descent to the earth,
their sighs in its soothing embrace,
(songs seldom heard in our hectic universe)
and capturing the timbres with ink
in their grace.

being a writer is having sore hands
weathered from the creation of words and worlds
we pluck from the depths of dynamic imaginations;
it’s dark circles under eyes
and the constant shifting of conceptual cogs,
whirring and clicking truths into place.

being a writer is a lifetime of waiting
for something that might never exist,
heeding to the parts of you
that stubbornly insist
it will, it must,
and learning to trust those small voices.

IronSpark wrote:...for about 10 minutes, go through your piece and find words that can be "elevated". That is, words that can be substituted for other words to make your writing more emotional, resonate more with the reader, etc.

Basically. You have captured the entire essence of being a writing in this one poem. "Songs seldom heard in our hectic universe." These are the most beautiful words. You've really made good choices as far as those go.

Honestly, I don't know what you should fix. I read this poem and thought, "Yeah, that's it. She's done it (or he)." I don't know what to tell you except for that this is really amazing and also sort of makes me want to write more. I love your word usage. And man, I'll say that again. I LOVE YOUR WORD USAGE. This poem truly is beautiful.

I would put this in a poem book and publish it right now, if I could. Unfortunately, I don't have that power. AMAZING JOB!

Keep Writing (these poems because they are amazing)
-Grace