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Hi its Terian here to review this work! This was interesting, you've got something good in this story. It's certainly got loads of potential. The story is unusual. A tale ...

This is so cool! Even though it was pretty short the whole thing gave a weird dreamlike feel with the italics, punctuated by the main characters thoughts. Definitely publish #2, ...

Hi Terian to review this work. This was really cool and mysterious. Interesting straight off of the bat, with all the fire, and the arrival of the ambulance. Nice job! ...

Hi there! Terian to get this work out of the Green Room! I liked this. Like MadWriter I felt the third person omniscient gave a charming feel to the story, ...

Hi there, Terian here to get this work on the way out of the Green Room! This was pretty cool. You've obviously done a lot of thought and world building ...

Hey there and well done with this! I saw this work in the Green Room so I read the first two parts before reviewing this. I didn't review the others ...

Hi Roecker! Wow how cool was this! It had a nice futuristic feel to it, and got me hooked straight away even though there wasn't much action. That's difficult to ...

Hi there Dreamer! What a creepy little short story! I enjoyed this a lot! It was fairly short so there's not much to go on, but no less good! It ...

Hi there! This was pretty awesome I have to say! I don't tend to be into younger age aimed fantasy generally, but damn you've got latched on to he story! ...

Hi, Terian here to review your work! To start off with I'd just like to ask about the title. This appears to be a short story, but it says '1'. ...

Hi there! Wow I love the look of this. I agree with Joy it gets you properly hooked and I'm definitely looking forward to seeing what you'll come up with ...

Hi there Pernicus! Well done with this story it was generally very very good and I enjoyed reading it! Maybe add 'fantasy' to the chapters genre. Some things that I ...

Hi Niteowl Terian here for a review. And I've got to say you've done a marvellous job! 'Condemmed in Red' wow I love that title! It really draws you in ...

Hi I'm Terian and I'm going to do the first review for your chapter. Well done JKHatt I enjoyed reading this! You did well with the sense of mystery, so ...

Wow what a cool little intro! It was very well written and disconcerting. Good job with conveying that sense. The intro was very original, and I liked your ideas, especially ...