Terian805

This is really nice. I like all the internal rhymes and alliteration. It's really punchy, something that I could imagine working well as lyrics over some intense emotional folk piece, ...

This is very good, I love the conciseness and precision of your writing. The narration/the voice of the protagonist sounds super believable. The Uncle's definitely a creepy character. I'm a ...

Hey there. You've got a lovely writing style; I love the simple way that you move from one subject naturally onto another, without making sentences too complicated or messy. You're ...

Hey there! This is pretty lovely. I particularly like how the narrator comes across as a very vivid, clearly painted person. She's got an interesting way of behaving, like she ...

Hello, this was a great idea for a story. It's great how you've used Inuit names and depicted a believable society of reindeer. I always like little info-drops that are ...

Hiya, this was pretty enjoyable, you're obviously pretty skilled at using rhyme and rhythm. The changes in the two between stanzas seemed to make sense; the whole poem felt very ...

Hi there, this is my first review in a while so I apologise if I'm out of practice. I thought I'd try bring up some stuff that Anamel might have ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS! This is a great site so I hope that you have a good time here. If you have any questions then PM any moderators of ...

Hi there! This certainly drew me in. I love a good modern take on a classic fairy tale. I can imagine this being the plot for some interesting stage play, ...

Hi, this was brilliant. You have a whole host of brilliant ideas pushing through here. I'm loving the idea of the horror stories mirroring the events of the outside world. ...

Hi, this was a very interesting introduction to what I'm sure will prove to be a very interesting story. I can see the very original method you're taking in creating ...

Hi there Terian here for a review! Welcome to YWS by the way since I saw that you joined on the 30th! OK, so first of all, I'd love this ...

Hi there, Terian here to get this work on the way out of the Green Room. As I took a look at this chapter, I was slightly dubious when starting ...

Hi there, Terian here to do the first review for this work! If you'll forgive me, I think that I'll just go over chapter one, as I'm not if I ...

Hi Terian here! This was a pretty good short story with a neat little concept, and well written description of characters, place, action, etc. The idea was pretty good, but ...