Tenyo

Hey 5h4d0w This isn't a specific chapter review, but thoughts on the novel so far. I'm really enjoying it, Elise is a great character and full of energy, I like ...

Hey Inaya! Chapter 1 I love that opening. It's so atmospheric and you've immediately managed to create a sense of place and conflict within the first few lines. Also announcing ...

Hey R.R! These paragraphs are huuuge! I reckon in a regular paperback that first paragraph would take up two or three pages just on its own. Is that a stylistic ...

This is so good! Personally I love this method of storytelling, it's such an interesting perspective. It's like... shining a torch on all the corners of a room but leaving ...

"...hatred's tombstone is not yet inscribed." This line is amazing, and I think really captures the essence of what's happening in current affairs at the moment. What I love about ...

Hey Mememimer! This is definitely one of those poems where the last line defines the whole meaning, and I love that. Whilst reading it the first time it seemed quite ...

Hey Starlitmind! I'll start by saying that there are some great things about this, but... 'I didn't love me' is grammatically incorrect and I can't get over the repetition of ...

Hey Em16! I like the metaphor in this. Stars and galaxies are usually used to refer to something expansive and powerful, and using in this context of something being reduced ...

Hey Liberty! The structure of this makes me happy. The variation of the sentence lengths and the wavy in-and-out visual of it on the screen is so good! I like ...

Hey Silverquill12! This is a really emotive piece. It feels like you've taken a very true feeling and poured it onto the page. What I really like is the way ...

Hey Shallowhouse! As a complete story I find it a bit difficult to see where the plot arc is. I completely agree with Em16, there are things in the introspection ...

Hey LZPianoGirl I'm particularly fond of haiku. They're like tiny snippets of sentiment, and because they're quick to read and easy to remember they stick in my head like little ...

Hey Plainandsimple! This is an interesting choice of format. It definitely looks and reads like a poem. That's not necessarily a bad thing, it might work better that way. I ...

Hey Sulagna! Oh gosh, that ending! It's so ambiguous, but in a good way. Ifthe man who got hit by a car was the man who they had spoken to... ...

Hey JenTep! I like the opening. It doesn't feel like an info-dump to me because you've written it in such an interesting way. The language you've used and the way ...