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Swiftfur

  • Short Story » General, Realistic Re: Madness

    This was a good story! Although you need a little work on grammar, spelling, and punctuation, It has a good flow, and a catchy title. This one part caught me ...

    May 26, 2013
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Red

    This poem is beautiful. Don't get me wrong, though! I've seen a lot of great poems, but this one stands out. Like Elizabeth said, you used colors to dramatize your ...

    May 26, 2013
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: Magellan's Dream

    Wow. I cannot fathom how a bee inspired this. Anyway, review. No grammatical errors. Perfect spelling and punctuation. Good descriptive and figurative language. Nice flow of words. All-in-all, a fine ...

    May 26, 2013
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Perfect Fantasy

    Hello there! Swiftfur here to review for you. You certainly know your English! I saw no mistakes is grammar, punctuation, or spelling! This piece had excellent descriptive words, figurative language, ...

    May 26, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, Other Re: Roses are red violets are blue

    Hello there, Swiftfur here, reporting for duty. I liked this poem very much, it's very, well, (That was horrible, let me restart.) The beginning is the part that really hooks ...

    May 8, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Fire Within

    I loved this poem, through and through. No grammar mistakes, good flow, catches your attention from the first word. These are all the markings of a good poem. You passed ...

    May 5, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Supernatural Re: FEAR part 1/2 ( completely revised and updated)

    Well, this is one heck of a story! I enjoyed reading it very much, but there are some major things missing. 1: Punctuation. I noticed you don't put periods before ...

    May 4, 2013
  • Short Story » Realistic, Health Re: Trust me...

    I loved this short story. It was so, how can I say, eerie, in a way, even a bit spooky. Some people have had things happen to them where friends ...

    Apr 28, 2013
  • Poetry » General, General Re: To My Mother

    Edgar Alen Poe if such a good writer. Although this poem is not yours, I want to review something, so I'll review it for Edgar. So, in the beginning, you ...

    Apr 28, 2013
  • Lyrics » Realistic, General Re: Rocker

    This song is beautiful. The words flow together to create something...magical. It's almost like your in the fairytale, and you can see them, know what I mean? This song is ...

    Apr 28, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Mystery / Suspense, Humor Re: No Such Thing And Never Was

    Hooooooooooooooooooooooooooooly crow. Never in my short life have I EVER seen such writing. The last paragraph is especially good; it contains lots of information about, 'what's her face's' mom. It's ...

    Apr 18, 2013
  • Poetry » Romantic, Humor Re: Paloma, my sweet little love.

    Hello there! As I was reading, I noticed a little error near the end. "Oh, how I love the sound of you quiet purrs that can only come from you." ...

    Apr 6, 2013
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The Fall of Domina Clepta -Chapter Three

    Hello there! While I was reading, I noticed some spelling errors. "fallowed", should be, "followed". Also, you used "hide" when you should have used, "hidden". I also noticed this sentence ...

    Apr 4, 2013
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Supernatural Re: Your Gaurdian Angel

    Well! This is a great story, but i noticed the word, sobbed, and, sobbing, used too much. It's sometimes a good idea to juice up your story with different and ...

    Mar 29, 2013
  • Short Story » Fantasy, Supernatural Re: Your Gaurdian Angel

    We! This is a great story, but i noticed the word, sobbed, and, sobbing, too much. It's sometimes a good idea to juice up your story with different and new ...

    Mar 29, 2013


For in everything it is no easy task to find the middle ... anyone can get angry—that is easy—or give or spend money; but to do this to the right person, to the right extent, at the right time, with the right motive, and in the right way, that is not for everyone, nor is it easy; wherefore goodness is both rare and laudable and noble.
— Aristotle