Fire Within

I loved this poem, through and through.
No grammar mistakes, good flow, catches your attention from the first word.
These are all the markings of a good poem.
You passed the great poem test.
As for rating, I say 5 stars out of 5.
Keep writing, I'm curious to see your other pieces of work.

~Swiftfur, sister of Stori the Unofficial Chat Cat

I 100% love it. You did a great job. I love your end rhyme. It has just the right amount of emotion and it kept my attention which isnt eassy. I have to say my faveroite stanza was
" keep it burning bright
for people led astray
let it be a light
to those who lost their way."
Like i said i love it. Its a beautifull poem.
great job
-t

Hey,
I really liked this poem, you have some beautiful imagery in it, so well done.
It was very easy to read yet at the same time has a lot of symbolism in it which makes you want to reread it again and again, this is a sign of a good poem.

I don't have many critiques, except watch your wording here and there. You have some words such as 'and', 'it' etc. which don't need to be there. So just watch that.
Overall though you have a very good poem which is a nice flow to it, and great meaning behind it.

I looke forward to reading more of your stuff.

Nargls xxxx

Very good, very good! I really like this. However, just a few things:


Grammar:
Great job! I didn't see any spelling errors. Maybe add comma after bright and light.

Flow:
Great flow for the most part, however there are one or two things that could change:

Fuel it with hope,
do not give it hate.
It will be a rope
to help you plan escape

I would maybe shorten the last line and have it read: "to help plan escape" and just take the you out. It breaks the rythym just a little bit.

Content:
I did find this to be just a little cliche. Maybe find a different way to express this. I have seen this phrase many, many times.

Keep it burning bright
for people led astray.
Let it be a light
to those who lost their way.

Overall, you are doing great! I found this to be an enjoyable poem. Just fix the little mistakes and you will be on your way. Good luck and keep writing!

~Kay

Comment: Wow, you are so talented! Very nice! I hope to see more of your work! This poem is so amazing!

Errors:
1. All your lines need to be capitolized like the first letter of each line.
2. You need to add more ",'s"

Megz219

So motivational, yet so simple.

I really enjoyed. Simple lines like "Let it be a light / to those who lost their way", "and when things would get hard, / trust the fire in your heart" lead to a complex train of thought, and make dealing with problems seem easier.

I would change only one line: "It will be a rope / to help you plan escape" to "It will be a rope / to help plan your escape".

Well done, Mystery!

This was an emotional, and symbolic poem which is pretty well thought out. =3
It has very good descriptive qualities, and it levels with the reader.
Very easy to digest too.


Now for the review:

You've always had it in you;
the embers that glow red,
the burns that you rue,
and the flames that you spread.

You've always had it in you,
the embers that glow red;
The burns that you rue,
the flames that you spread;

Fuel it with hope,
do not give it hate.
It will be a rope
to help you plan escape

Fuel it with hope,
do not give it hate;
It can be your rope
to help you escape;

Keep it burning bright
for people led astray.
Let it be a light
to those who lost their way.


Let it keep you warm,
do not fear its heat,
it will lead you by the arm
through your next big feat.

Keep moving forward,
you can make a new start,
and when things would get hard,
trust the fire in your heart.