Published March 28, 2013
Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence and mature content.
Trisha fell onto her bed. Her pillow muffled out her heartbroken sobs. "How could I have been so stupid!" She said aloud. "I should have known he never really cared! All guys are such liars! I hate them all!" Trisha kicked a nearby stuffed animal across the room. "I will destroy every last memory of him and me!"
Trisha got up and stormed across the room to where the stuffed animal now lay. She hugged it close as hot tears rolled down her face. As he squeezed it she activated the voice box hidded inside the toys plush stomach; 'I love you!' Trisha stared at the toy for a few minutes, debating in her heart and her mind what she should do with this particular memory. She finally squeezed the toy's little neck, as if she was trying to kill it. "To bad that was all a lie!" She screamed into the toy's face and threw it out the window of her second story bedroom. She watched fly through the air and finally hit the driveway in front of her house. She took a few deep breaths and turned back to face her room.
Trisha was shocked. As she turned around to continue destroying more memories she saw an all to familiar face standing in her room. "J-Jessie?"
Jessie looked at Trisha, sad and confused. "Why would you throw your bear away? I gave that to you for Valentines day." Trisha couldn't help but notice the tears starting to fill his eyes. She stood there for a moment, staring, not knowing what to say. Then she decided to continue on with her rampage.
Trisha pushed Jessie aside and stomped toward her mirror. This is where she kept some of her favorite pictures of her and Jessie. She picked up one. It was from their first date. Trisha had a fake smile plastered on her face. She mindlessly faltered around the room staring at the picture for some time then stopped in front of Jessie. She stood silent for a moment staring at Jessie and back to the picture. Suddenly she shoved the picture into his face. "What happened to these times? How come we can't be happy anymore? Why are you leaving me!"
Jessie sobbed now. "I explained to you when we met that I would only be here a short time."
"You gave me all this time to get attached and fall totally in love, then you want to leave me with nothing but memories! I thought you said you were my guardian angel! I thought you said God sent you here for me!" Trisha clutched the picture to her chest.
"I did say that and it was to. But now, It is my time to leave. You need to show me you can stand on your own to feet now. Show me how strong you are my love."
"Oh Ill show you how strong I am fucker!"
Trisha ran out of the room and Jessie heard her in the kitchen rummaging through a drawer. He tried to follow her but she was already back in the room before he knew it. This time. She had a knife to her throat.
"What are you doing" Jessie yelled and started to run to her.
"Don't you move Jessie! I swear, I am not afraid to do it!" She pressed the knife slowly into her neck. Jessie fell to the floor sobbing and shaking.
"What do you want from me?"
Trisha laughed sarcastically. "You said you were my guardian angel! You liar!"
"I am your guardian angel! But all guardian angels have to leave your sight some time. It doesn't mean I wont still be there. I am your guardian angel." Jessie reached out to her, his hand trembling. "Give me the knife, my love."
Trisha only smiled and laughed maniacally. "You are such a liar!" She sobbed one last time as she dug the knife deep into her throat. It broke the skin and blood splattered everywhere as it easily cut through her jugular.
Jessie jumped up to catch her as her body fell limp. The last thing Trisha saw was this bright glow around Jessie and she could of swore she saw what looked like wings. She heard him say one last thing. "I will always be there to catch you." Jessie was sobbing. "I'm your guardian angel after all." Then everything went black.
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AAAAHHHH!! Such a good story it almost made me cry!! It had so much emotion in it it almost felt so real. Like as if I was actually there or looking through Trisha's eyes, just simply wonderful!! Keep up the wonderful work and write some more soon!!
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Okay at the begining I enjoyed it, but then when got to the end, I was like what the heck, you used a random cuss word that didn't need to be there, and why did he randomly come into her room after breaking up or whatever he did, the end that's what got me into what,
The title is spelt wrong, should be "Your Guardian Angel". ^-^
Well! This is a great story, but i noticed the word, sobbed, and, sobbing, used too much.
It's sometimes a good idea to juice up your story with different and new words.
Oh, and one other thing, the part where she saw Jessie, you said an all to familiar face. To should be too.
Keep up the good work though! I like the beginning.
We! This is a great story, but i noticed the word, sobbed, and, sobbing, too much.
It's sometimes a good idea to juice up your story with different and new words.
Oh, and one other thing., the part where she stammered Jessie's name shold be, J-jessie, instead of, J-Jessie.
Keep up the good work!
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save the worlddo a quick review[quote] She stood silent for a moment staring at Jessie and back to the picture.Suddenlyshe shoved the picture into his face.[quote]
picture.SuddenlysheWhy is it all joined up? Please write 'picture. Suddenly she'[quote]As he squeezed it she activated the voice box hidded inside the toys plush stomach; 'I love you!'[quote]
hiddedShouldn't it be hiddenThat's all the spell mistakes.
There are some minor spelling mistakes through out uit and the wrong uses of words for instance to - two. I loved the story and I would love to read more of it!! Keep up the excellent work!
I see the mistakes I made! Thats what I get for forcing myself to stay up and write when I should have been sleeping! Haha! That is probably another reason there are so many mistakes! Because I was writing this quickly before I fell asleep at my keyboard!
But thank you for reading! I'm glad you enjoyed it! This was actually supposed to just be a short story though I'm not sure if there wil be more of this particular one. But if not I'll try to write similar things.