Supermeggs12

The narrative, is refreshing. I switches from first person, to second person p.o.v. The dialogue is very natural sounding, and flows nicely into your story. There aren't any major grammatical ...

Hello, I've come to review your lovely story. I like your writing, but you need to fix your grammar... "I believed our brains were fused together, that she knew all ...

Okay, you write really well :) I love your characters, they all have very defined personalities. Although in the beginning paragraphs, you use too many dashes. Usually, I don't like ...

Some of your sentences are choppy, like: "I still rememeber that exact night. I rememeber every single thing that happened." It would sound better, as: "I still rememeber that night, ...

Very sad, but well written. However, I would suggest you work on pace. The piece seemed to go by in a blink, and if you just added more detail to ...

It's sad. But I liked it. The message it had was thought provoking, and it will definitely stay with me. Although, here are my corrections: "no thing or no body" ...

It has a great message, and I like the way it flowed. The questions in the first stanza were good too. The second stanza flowed a bit less, and the ...

Hello, I'm Supermeggs(most call me Meggs) and I will be reviewing your piece! Let's start: This intrigued me from the beginning, and I like the idea. Although, throughout I kept ...

There is a lot of dialogue, and not quite enough substance. Although, I didn't notice any grammactical/punctuation errors. You see, most of what humans use is body language and facial ...

The dialogue sounds a bit unnatural at times also the way some things were worded was awkward. Present tense is always interesting to read, and I give you credit for ...

I'd say the repition in your words gets tedious. Try looking synonyms for words, you need more adjectives. Overall, it was really chilling. I only noticed a few mistakes, pretty ...

The emotions were nice and didn't seem forced, so nice job with that! Your writing style is odd, but I like it. Here's the grammactical errors: "Yourdone." - you mushed ...

This is good. However, the pest paragraph and the second paragraph don't really make sense as a whole. The first paragraph you are talking about a kind of life, the ...

It's short. So it might be hard to give this a review. The first two lines are very hooking, and fit very well with each other. However the last two ...

I am a little confused about the message of this poem. At first I thought this would be about lust, then I didn't know because she started describing her experiences, ...