StoryWeaver13

I really like this. It's a really sincere story and (I think) relatable to nearly anyone who doesn't quite fit the mold of "normal." I definitely remember being the weird ...

Cut the first stanza and you will have a brilliant poem. The first stanza is just cliche; it's dull, uninteresting, and overdone. Then you suddenly unwind into this story about ...

I always feel conflicted about religious pieces...but no matter! This was a decent poem, though perhaps a little tired. It's good, but it's redundant of things that have been done ...

I really like this. Some of your lines are beautifully simple - the way you describe the "crack" of lungs, or stars like startled horses. The message is near and ...

my problem with this is that it's just too sappy; I mean, it's literally oozing sap. The lines are dramatic and cliche, and I think that removes any sense of ...

This was really good! I wish that I could actually hear it with the beat, but alas, I have to use my own imagination. ^^ I have very little experience ...

Hey imallme, welcome to the site! Well this was okay, but could really improve with some pretty simple fixes. Your grammar (more specifically, your punctuation choices) disrupted the flow and ...

I actually really liked this poem (I read it via the last reviewer's fixed version XD). There was something very blunt but sentimental about it, and that's something that's hard ...

First off, welcome to the site! Alright, so a little tough love here. :3 I think you're rushing this a LOT. It's like "new semester, my friend's dead, but don't ...

Okay, so technical problems here before I can begin on the artistic ones. See how you're story is just one big block of text? That makes it both intimidating for ...

This is....vague. I feel like I can't have any emotional pull from it because it doesn't have flesh to cover the story's skeleton. It's written fine, but I would advise ...

This story definitely has a level of sentimentality to it, which I like so much. It's a story that most people can relate to (I know that I pictured this ...

I love the theme of this, as elusive as it is. It's really clever and I love the way you describe things like "the sheen of their wings, like pieces ...

The bell on the door rang as the man stepped into the still shop. [[Probably more efficient to just say "doorbell"]] “Hello?” he called. “I’m here!” called a voice. A ...

I actually am going to disagree with the first reviewer and say that I LOVE your vocabulary! I understand the words in context even if I don't know them off ...