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This could easily be a theme song to an anime, I think. Don't quote me on that though.

Wow, that was powerful writing.

This needs a heck of a lot of punctuation. Take a look at the school for instance. "Sleeping you were sleeping" See what I mean?

There are a few spelling errors. "Every morning I rude [should be "ride"] down the driveway." "Then I endure a day of torcher." [should be "torture."] Other than that, it's ...

I am: a writer and an artist. I wonder: where my next idea will come from. I hear: songs in my head. I see: a thousand possibilities. I want: to ...

Let me just say, that was amazing.

Very good. It flowed well and the rhyme scheme was great.

It's very good. Keeps the reader going.

That was an interesting story. Maybe you could call it "The Reluctant Santa." About the critique, I can't see any obvious errors. Good job.

It says that the trees on Grandma's lawn had no leaves. That's "bare," not "bear." And "there" should be "their." Other than that, good work.

I like it. No errors I could see.

It's very supenseful. You showed how Dave felt well.

The concept is interesting. You just need to flesh out the writing. Tell us more about Rowan: what he looks like, what he likes to do,

You really felt like that?

Whoa, that is creepy.