I Am poetry

my first initial is an A. my name is Anna and so i just put A instead.
i'm glad you liked it. grammar is usually a big deal to me but since it's on a this, i am not to concerned with it, considering i was bored when i put it on here in the first place. Thank You for your input anyways!!! =)

I love this! This was really good!

Everyone else already pointed out the spelling and grammer mistakes do keep it up!

I like it really I do. I only have one thing to say the first sentence is confusing

It says "your name: just call me ... A."

What is your name? How do you expect us to know who you are?

Well that is all I got to say. Good job with everything else. Practice your grammar though

your name: Beth

i am: the whisper
i wonder: what words i contain
i hear: only the thoughts in my mind
i see: only the truth behind
i want: only to give
i am: the wisper

i pretend: to be strong
i feel: like a fake
i touch: my heart
i worry: ill break
i cry: so silently
i am: the wisper

i understand: others worries
i say: that i know
i dream: of more
i try: so hard
i hope:to be heard
i am: the wisper

truly it is me.

Raven

i am: in love
i wonder: if you notice you got me hypnotized
i hear: your voice when I close my eyes
i see: you in my dreams
i want: you to love me back
i am: in love

i pretend: to be a princess, waiting for you to save me
i feel: like dying when I don't see your face
i touch: your name when the angels write it in the sky for me
i worry: that I love you for all the wrong reasons
i cry: when your beautiful brownish-green eyes look at me
i am: in love

i understand: that love is only a state of mind
i say: that only because I think love is blind
i dream: that some once upon a time you'll be mine
i try: so hard to get that happily ever after
i hope: you'll move on in my next chapter
i am: in love

i meant grammar. but you know.

when i type i usually don't worry about grammor unless its something for school or something really important.

i'm glad you liked it buddadancer!

hope everyone is having a nice week!

I just noticed this:

Suzanne said:

My only other issue with it is the fact that you never capitalize the pronoun I. Please respect grammar?

WOW i like it!

I really like this, kitty. It looks like you took time to do this. Either that or you're just that good. I like the fact that it rhymes. You're very good at this.

Have a great day everyone!

I'm in quite a poetic mood so why not -

your name: 'That which we call a rose By any other name would smell as sweet' so whether I be feline, flower or the essence of femininity. First, I be me.

I am: a dreamer whose dream has come and gone;
I wonder: could the stars replace my love with scorn?
I hear: the beating of a fading, withered heart.
I see: a life that's torn asunder, ripped apart.
I want: to know what's right and what is wrong.
I am: a dreamer whose dream has come and gone.

I pretend: that when I smile my happiness is true;
I feel: afraid to tell my past treachery to you.
I touch: the vale 'twixt what I am and what you see.
I worry: that when I am gone, you'll not remember me.
I cry: fifteen tears for you; for me there's just this one -
I am: a dreamer whose dream has come and gone.

I understand: much less than I would have you know.
I say: that when the truth is out, the lies have got to go.
I dream: that life was better before I dreamed of this;
I try: to twist the blood-stained cloth and wring it out to bliss.
I hope: that hope will leave my side; the nest forever flown.
I am: a dreamer whose dream has come and gone.

Pheobe i like how your poem went through stages of being a whore then a mother then a child. Thanks for trying it out!

ya know, you can learn alittle bit about people in these poems.

my name: whatever you want to call me, babe

i am: a whore
i wonder: why they call me that
i see: my cat, asleep, soft breathing
i want: just one more, just another, please
i am: a mother

i understand: why they call me that
i say: that they still don't know what it means
i dream: of things I never remember
i try: to remember, and fail, and shrug
i hope: it will be warm enough outside for a walk today
i am: a child

wow.. more replies...
shooting star i enjoyed yours, you sound like a dreamer....like me. Ayra, this made my night. 1+1 does indeed =2, you are right about that so maybe you won't fail math after all and you are whoever you want to be. Kyte yours was short but it gets the point across. Keep writing =)
Thanks for the replies!

I am: a writer and an artist.
I wonder: where my next idea will come from.
I hear: songs in my head.
I see: a thousand possibilities.
I want: to break out into the real world.
I am: a writer and an artist.

This looks awesome!

I am: Whoever I want to be
I wonder: About rain and fire
I hear: The sound of a thousand sufferings
I see: The trees outside my window
I want: So many things
I am: Whoever I want to be
I pretend: That I am a pirate
I feel: A vast sea of emotion
I touch: The rain-wet boughs of a willow tree
I worry: That one day I will be old
I cry: When I am angry at the world
I am: Whoever I want to be

I understand: That 1+1=2
I say: A river of words
I dream: Of flying on scarlet wings
I try: Not to fail Math class
I hope: That I will be young forever
I am: Whoever I want to be

This looks cool...hmmm...*thinks hard*...got it!

my name: Is anything you want it to be...

i am: An almost ordinary girl...
i wonder: Why...
i hear: The whisper of magic...
i see: Everything I need to...
i want: To contact my magical sisters...
i am: An almost ordinary girl...

i pretend: To see things normal people do...
i feel: For the shrinking forests...
i touch: Anyone who are willing to belive...
i worry: That my faery friends will dissapear...
i cry: For nature...
i am: An almost ordinary girl...

i understand: Everything magical...
i say: They are gardians of nature...
i dream: Of dragons and knights in shining armor...
i try: To see all, hear all, know all...
i hope: To see a different world...
i am: An almost ordinary girl...

That's cool...



Star

well we did have a school assignment for a "who am i?" poem but my teacher just gave us this outline as an example and i just filled the outline out on here. i didnt realize there was a writing assignments section but then again i am pretty new to this site and am just figuring things out alittle bit. i would have been more creative had i written it out before typing. oh well. maybe next time. thanks for trying it lyrical sunshine.

i saw it as a writing activity. i thought it looked fun. *shrug* so i'm going to try it!


i am: myself
i wonder: when I will get it
i hear: my own voice
i see: the sunrise
i want: to live again
i am: myself

i pretend: to have it together
i feel: very lost sometimes
i touch: freedom
i worry: that i'm forgetting something
i cry: because i don't feel good enough, but
i am: myself

i understand: how to let go
i say: that it doesn't matter
i dream: of not caring
i try: to surrender
i hope: live again
i am: myself

I think this belongs in writing activities, not here.

Anyway, in defense of my_wonderwall, I'm wondering if this was a school assignment? I had to do something similar, only I had to start every poem with "I am ..." If it's a school assignment, I think that you did well within what I assume are the boundaries of the assignment. If it's for yourself ... er, try to be a little more creative next time? (I seem to remember finding this outline while Googleing examples of "I am ..." poems for my own assignment.)

thatnks for your input but it was just something mainly for fun. I did not mean for this to seem like navel gazing and I am sorry if it seems that way. I wrote this poem as I typed it. But like I said, it was just something for fun. You should try it.

I am: sick of navel-gazing, cliche, angsty poems.

Oh, dear, I do agree with Suzie. Navel-gazing makes lovely journal entries, not poetry. It's okay to write a poem about something that happened to you, but it's just not okay to write the whole poem about yourself. What happened to us readers, eh? Don't care about us? Fine. If that's the way it is, we'll leave.

-Colleen

This is almost like a writing activity, isn't it? Oh well, I'll critique the poem anyway.

This style of poetry is... wow. Honestly, it should be killed and never allowed to come alive again, haha. Poetry, at least, readable-sharable poetry, is something that focuses a lot more on the reader than on the writer. You want to make the reader feel, think, realize something, and you want to avoid talking about you, you, you. That is called navel gazing, and no one wants to hear you talk about yourself. We want to learn about ourself through your words. Which is why a poem in this style fails so badly... It's a selfish style of poetry, haha, and leaves no room for your reader whatsoever.

My only other issue with it is the fact that you never capitalize the pronoun I. Please respect grammar?

hey good job. i like it.

(This looks like fun)

your name: (unknown)

i am: creative and bright
i wonder: what tomorrow will be like
i hear: music everywhere
i see: a world dancing
i want: to live and dream
i am: creative and bright

i pretend: everything
i feel: whatever my heart tells me to
i touch: anything new
i worry: that people might see straight through me
i cry: when i can't dream
i am: creative and bright

i understand: more than i say
i say: less than i mean
i dream: all the time
i try: my best to make things work
i hope: to always stay the same
i am: creative and bright

(Very thought inducing. I liked that)