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Beautiful poem, enriched with your faith and religion. You talk about death and salvation together and make give them meaning.

Pure genius. Enough said.

Is this a chapter of a book? It's fairly well written and it seems like you have a good story going. You mainly have punctuation and capitalization errors. You could ...

"I sat with a pen in my hand and paper on my desk and the desire to make a stand, to make a difference. Yet I got the sense, that ...

I love the topic of your poem, the one line I don't understand is 'Bacon is bacon, Eggs are Eggs' and you're is your. I think maybe you could add ...

Such a sad poem, such emotion. This could almost be a song if you rearranged it differently.One thing that would make it easier to read is if you could put ...

Thank you both for your reviews!

Sounds very nice, I like the ideas and the way you put them together.

I like what you're trying to convey in this poem, I can feel the hurt because my best friend went through something like that. Quick question in the part, "it ...

Thanks you guys @ninja, oops thanks for noticing that error, I miss out "loving one another" when I was typing it up. Thanks!

Great story! Some grammatical mistakes but otherwise good.