Squirtlepowiee

Hey!! Excellent story! I have a few tiny things to point out. “Wah?!” I jump, bumping into someone in the crowd before Curse grabs onto my arm, refocusing my vision ...

Hey, Squirtlepowiee here! Nice story! Most stories I read are in 3rd person, so to be reading on ein 1st is an interesting experience. I don’t have much to review. ...

Hey, Squirtlepowiee here! Nice story! Most stories I read are in 3rd person, so to be reading on ein 1st is an interesting experience. I don’t have much to review. ...

Hey! Nice fight scene. I like how you described the fight scene in chronological order. A few nitpicks I have: “Igtytous blade got stuck in the roof of the car.” ...

Haiii! Wow! Your story flows soooo smoothly. It seems like there is a natural conversation happening between the characters. There wasn't much I could edit, but here are a few ...

Haiii! This is a very nice, short poem. I don't have too much to review because it's short, so this may end up being a comment. I think you should ...

Haiii!! Nice story! I found a few things that sounded weird to me but other than that, it is good! "It was the little things like that she noticed, the ...

Haiii! First of all, nice story. I love how each paragraph flows into the next. I like stories with excitement and "deadlines" (if you know what I mean xD). A ...

Haiii! Nice story! I love the ending, it makes me want to read more. Are you going to be continuing the story? Or is this just a short story. Two ...

Oh my... First of all, one thing. One. I am pretty sure Santa does not curse like that. In front a little girl too! Then I read on. A spelling ...

Haiii! Whoa! By the time I finished reading the first stanza, I could tell that it was going to be amazing! I rarely see poetry that has a perfect rhyme ...

Haiii! This is very true! Your poem gives a lot of insight on many places in the world where people aren't as lucky as we are. I wouldn't rate this ...

Haiii! :O Very pretty! Your poem delivers a very warm feeling. Everything is pretty good, except a few tiny things here and there. I don't think the dauntless North Star ...

Haiii! Wow! I really like this piece! It's very descriptive and realistic. I don't really know anything that is really out of place. I think the rhythm could use some ...

Haiii! I love this poem. I have a few questions. Is the entire thing not capitalized on purpose? Also, when you are writing something, try keep a consistent 'tense' in ...