-
Re: Tears of War
I love this poem. There is only one suggestion I want to make, "America now, America then, and forever, again." What if you split this line up. It would rhyme ...
Feb 5, 2016 -
Re: String of Dark Realization
O.k I would give you some constructive criticism but the truth is, I don't have any! At first I was kind of confused because the lines had no real format, ...
Feb 5, 2016 -
Re: The Memory
Wow this is really good I like this. The one thing I want to point out though is, " A trunk a chest" what if you added a comma between ...
Feb 5, 2016 -
Re: 05/06/2015
I like this. I know from experience that mental illness and self harm is hard to deal with. This kind of brings me relief to know that someone else is ...
Feb 4, 2016 -
Re: Suffering Before Healing
I love this poem. You did a very good job. I like how you described the things people feel when life isn't going so great for them. The inspirational part ...
Feb 4, 2016 -
Re: The New Life Program
O.k I like this but I want to say a few things, 1. In the ninth paragraph you said Sophie was surprised at what was parked up front, you didn't ...
Feb 4, 2016 -
Re: Mother Doesn't Want Me To Swim
I like this but it is slightly confusing. The last 2 stanzas was slightly confusing. Maybe you could add a little more to explain the poem? This is just a ...
Feb 4, 2016 -
Re: I Miss You
I think this is pretty good for a 5 minute quick poem. I want to say a few suggestions though: 1. For one stanza you only have one line. I ...
Feb 4, 2016 -
Re: Ten Steps of Wow Did I Really Just Do That?
Ok I like this but there are some things I want to say: 1. It seems like more of a "How-To" than a poem. Maybe try to add some more ...
Feb 4, 2016 -
Re: The Color of Regret
I like this poem it is really good. But, I want to give a few suggestions: 1. "But time turns all memories gray" I think this line would be better ...
Jan 28, 2016 -
Re: The Little Mermaid
Wow you did a good job. I like the rhyme scheme. It really makes the poem flow. You did a good job separating the stanzas. The only thing that needs ...
Jan 25, 2016 -
Re: Infuriating
You did a great job but I am going to give a few suggestions 1."Why can't we do away with them" Try putting a question mark at the end of ...
Jan 25, 2016 -
Re: Societys Image Of Me
O.k I like this quite a bit but I am going to give you some suggestions: 1. for some would rather not, others say why not, what if you tried ...
Jan 22, 2016 -
Re: And isn't that unfair
Nicely done. This poem was fantastic. I do have a question though. For the beginning of each line you have some letters capitalized and some not, was that on purpose? ...
Jan 22, 2016
