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Re: Viva Christo Rey!
Yeah! VIVA CRISTO REY! *cheers* I recently read Graham Greene's book, The Power and the Glory , and this poem totally reminded me of that. It's about a Mexican priest ...
Feb 18, 2015 -
Re: For the Love of the Underdog (Graduate School Personal Statement)
HI. I love you. Can I bludgeon you with my love? Championing literal underdogs like Turtle is a relatively new passion of mine. I have only been involved in animal ...
Feb 10, 2015 -
Re: Eating Disorders in Ballet: A Call To Action
Hi! This is going to be a quick and dirty review... Paragraph 2 has no citations. It looks like an introductory paragraph (without the thesis statement), to be completely honest. ...
Jan 30, 2015 -
Re: Unborn Child
Hi! I tried to make a poem kind of like this (not about a stillbirth... about a loss of pregnancy) months and months ago, but it turned out really bitter ...
Jan 30, 2015 -
Re: Boy Craze
Hi! So... uh... did you misspell Justine Bieber's name on purpose? Or is that supposed to be a thing that you did on purpose? Also, I am probably missing some ...
Dec 21, 2014 -
Re: A Feminine Definition
Ugh. You make all these possibilities sound horrible. It would be like me making a poem about Masculinity and talking about: 1. How men are dominant and tend to rule ...
Dec 13, 2014 -
Re: Departure Scene
Hey Griffypoo! The thing that threw me off was this line: "She didn't show up and there aren't any records of her being on station," Grif said; staring blankly at ...
Dec 11, 2014 -
Re: Transgender Day of Remembrance
Hi! So, I am kind of hesitant to comment on this much, because I know how much this poem means to you. However, I saw a couple of odd things, ...
Nov 21, 2014 -
Re: Acceptance is Not a Lie: Counter Essay to "Christianity is a Lie"
I was just thinking about this essay the other day, and now it is a featured work! Coincidence? I think not! First, before I tackle the essay, here's some nit-picky ...
Nov 10, 2014 -
Re: I Am Too Strong
Hi Deanie! Okay... this needs some serious trimming. Too strong you may be, but this reads more like an essay or a blog entry rather than poetry. And, before you ...
Oct 23, 2014 -
Re: Prologue
Okay! So, I take it you want to make it creepier? My advice is don't give away everything. The first sentence tells a lot . Probably too much. What if ...
Oct 23, 2014 -
Re: Wayne Brady's Haircut
One thing that you neglected to mention is Wayne Brady's lovely, sparkling eyes. They laugh whenever he smiles. It's like they reflect a hundred million stars... or perhaps they are ...
Sep 19, 2014 -
Re: Why Christianity Is A Lie: A Comprehensive Breakdown of the Failures Within Christianity Part 1
This is going to be a very quick and dirty grammar check, since the grammar mistakes bug me, and because Drak might be interested in correcting them. Actually, I lied! ...
Sep 12, 2014 -
Re: Deleted 45
The first two lines were fantastic, because it displayed the full range of emotions for camels... the harsh work they undergo out of love for us humans, how utterly timeless ...
Sep 2, 2014 -
Re: The three biggest lies on the internet
I have probably sold my soul several times, with regards to not reading the terms and conditions. But that's okay. I think... Still! I am going to point out that ...
Jul 22, 2014
