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[quote="SkaterPunk2011"][u][b]Stone Cold[/b][/u] His hands felt of concrete, as they traced along my back. Shivers of cold ran down my spine. Trying to gasp for the air slipping away. Holding on ...

i like this it is great. All you have to do is add punctionuation to it. Even though it is a poem in stanza form it needs commas,periods, etc. But ...

like liz said tjis can be a strong poem. Only if you make it to be it that way. I think it was a very indeed good poem. I think ...

Nah It isn't my type of story. i think it is long and drawn out. If you want to make a story like this make it fun and adventorous(sorry if ...

Hi I am gothgirl originally but i changed my name. I like what you got here it is a little depressing and cliche but isn't bad at all. Eat this ...

Its a little overrated and cliche for me because i don't like the repitition. It gets annoying like i said before on your last critique. I don't feel like typing ...

Very interesting LOL. I really liked it. Good content in the story (which is very important in writing any kind of story.) Well Done i say. I try to say ...

[quote="Extraterrestial"]short stroy i wrote when i had writers block Do you mean story? Ring,Ring, death is here. I don't understand this line here. What does this suppose to mean? The ...

I really don't know what to do here... I like it but i don't like it. It gives mixed signals to me really. But I am not really feeling this ...

I don't even think this is poetry. A short story but not poetry. First off It isn't wrote in a normal kind of poetry form. I think you should of ...

I think it is kind of Cliche to me kind of original. It was a good poem but not the best i seen written. But very well put together i ...

[quote="piepiemann22"]Not much can be said of a crush that I have. It comes and it goes, but It should be known. True feelings can confuse, ones heart they consume, but ...

I am really kind of busy right now so i am going to make this short, sweet and to the point. OK? I really think you could of added more ...

Had a mother who watched me like a hawk, waiting to swoop down on me if my skirt was, a tad too short. I've been there too; I'm not that ...

[quote="SirWozzell"]I stand alone In this huge field. I’m surrounded by grass Lush and perfectly green. There a trees around And a lake With sand near its sides. I feel that ...