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hehehe..may be I just felt like puting it in caps. glad you liked it. Thanks.

huh!

Umm... well the tiny bit of things has been already picked out by eleinasari . And I thought too that your work was descriptive and good,though it lacked some catchy ...

Well done!

Phorcys wrote:I think Quatrains are the few occasions where a poem should rhyme. I didn't think this poem had a flow to it and was more of an overview than ...

Its a nice piece of work but somewhere you seemed to be confused. Keep writing and posting itin here. Good try!:)

Good try!Work on it and you will get the best out of it.

You have a large vocabulary for a seven year old. Griff thats his posts number,he is 13yrs old. So I am saying that You(Arclight) have a large vocabulary for a ...

avoid the scribble thing.

yeah its in the right place. The extract seems good. Keep up your good work.

well that was pretty cool,that is all i can say.

Yeah ofcourse thats ur opinion. sorry if u feel i was rude.

I disagree, Rhyme is not essential in poetry and Im beginning to prefer non-rhyming poetry as the poet concentrates on theme more as oposed to getting it to rhyme. I ...

It was a nice try. 3 ***

This should go under the forum 'Other'. Try it over there. :)