Published December 30, 2006
I did this for Homework but i guess ill post them here too lol ^^
Fire
Searing inferno
The light of the sun within
Renewing the land.
Water
Caressing and calm,
The violence and the mercy
Divine and deadly.
Earth
The roots of living,
The lakes of tranquillity
Natures creation.
Air
Howling and biting
Screeches like a banshee
Still as the moon.
(btw i did them in Yr 7 so go easy on me)
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Haikus aren't normally my favorite genre of poetry either. I think they're difficult to write well because the strict length and syllable pattern is so constricting. However, these were pretty well-written, especially considering you were in 7th grade. They go together well, and you managed to give them imagery and meaning despite being confined to very few words. They didn't blow me away or anything, and several of the phrases sounded pretty cliche, but they were an enjoyable read. The one entitled "Water" was my favorite.
Keep writing!
No offence to the purple balloon but I disagree. It's not everyone who can write a good haiku,and you managed to pull it off well! The air one actually sent a chill down my back!
x frm lucy
Im not a Haiku fan as it is and these just reiterate my dislike. They dont really make sense and are rather vague in the sense that some lines are just a little random like Griffin has pointed out.
Griff thats his posts number,he is 13yrs old.
So I am saying that You(Arclight) have a large vocabulary for a 13 yr old.
^^ Ok hehe i thought it might have been mixed terms between UK and America or something.
Ahhhh, that IS a bit more believable.
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(Sorry! Homeschooler over here! We don't really go by grades.
I go to school with Arclight lol
No by Year seven he means--- Grade 7,
Why harsh? Do you mean unbelievable?
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(Sorry Arclight, but if we don't believe that you wrote it when you were seven and you did, then we just paid you a great compliment by saying that you wrote a poem SO GOOD we didn't believe you were seven when you wrote it.
I think that 7 year old bit is a bit harsh...
I deleted the other thread.
The first line is okay because it is:
Sear-ing in-fer-no.
I'm more interested in the things afterwards.
The first line is directly connected with fire. The second line is weird: the light within what? It makes it sound like you're referring to a person. The last line seems to be completely out of sync with fire. Molten lava might be different, but the two aren't the same.
The same thing happens with the rest of the Haikus. Technically, they fit, but they don't remind me of the elements they are supposed to represent.
You have a large vocabulary for a seven year old.
I've just started writing haikus so I am not an expert in it.I'll try to give my opinions on this.
I like the haiku on water.
Isn't the first line suppose to have 5 syllables.I think its having six.Se-ar-ing-in-fer-no.
I may be wrong.Tell me on this and then I can actually give my views properly.