SheepMonoxide

Hey ThorinEddardBaggins!! I don't supposed this is inspired by A Game of Thrones? I've just started reading the first one and I'm pretty sure I read that line last night! ...

Wow. I really like this. I don't know if you meant to give this kind of message but it does actually make me think of someone who maybe finds it ...

This is great! XD I adore it, seriously. This is just what little kids are like, they don't stop and this is probably exactly what's going through their mind! I ...

Hey! :) Well obviously there are a few things you need to sort, like grammar and spelling, making sure you capitalize words at the begining of a sentence and when ...

I can see what you're doing here, and I like the idea. Although, even though it is a prologue and I know they are supposed to be short, I in ...

I think it's amazing, I love your beautiful way of using your words! Although I agree with a few people's criticisms, but other than a few things. I liked the ...

Wow. You're a really awesome, great... fantastic writer!! xD I can't even find anything to "nitpick". I love the language you use, especially when you compare walking on leaves to ...

Gasp! I'm not too good at giving advice to things this good. So, really there's no point in me giving advice! XD I'm shocked though. :O How's she gonna get ...

Thanks for the PM! I've actually got a couple of nit-picks this time o,o Strange. There was a few moments of silence, Shouldn't that be 'were' instead of 'was', unless ...

It was a Saturday afternoon and me and my best friend, Rose, were at the park across from our school sitting on a blanket in the warm sunshine. [Try to ...

Her name was Angelique, and she was a witch. [I think you could've maybe not told us she's a witch yet and introduced this later on, give it more of ...

Gah. That was great. Though I find it hard to believe that there'd be weed growing in a school.. uh.. o.o I guess none of it was really.. practical? I ...

“Yesterday I taught you thermodynamics. Have you revised all of the laws?” Asked Miss Ghost addressing all of the students in the class. Imagine a t eacher with thick 2.5 ...

Thank you for the PM.

Nightgown clinging to her body she raced through the sparse trees towards the intersection. Just a big closer she thought. Just a bit closer and I will see her. Gilded ...