Shearwater

Hello Cay! Lovely story you have here. I really like how you have a plot already set and you know which direction you're heading - it's always important to have ...

Hi Adelina, I’m Shear and here to review. One of the first things I noticed was your overuse of the ‘my’ in your writing. For example, we can look at ...

Hi CM, Writing: For a thirteen-year-old your writing shows promise if you continue. That said, there are some things that you should take a moment to brush over: dialogue punctuation, ...

Hello Antonio, So this seems like a very interesting setup. I mean, I would actually kinda freak out if I found a boy in my dog house. Curious. How old ...

Hey there, Wow! This was a very fast paced chapter. Take a nice deep breath, slow down, re-read what you wrote, and ask yourself if you understand it – because ...

Hi Star, This is a really sad and beautiful story. I love the miracle born of tragedy side of this and I think you did a pretty wonderful job at ...

Hey Soul! Wow, this is a really short chapter! I think you should try to make it longer, don’t be afraid of length and if you think it’s too long ...

Hi Myth, I don’t really see the need for you to have a prologue here. It’s actually unnecessary and what you’ve mentioned in the prologue could easily be molded into ...

Hey there Leah, Your introduction to this chapter is a little on the bland side. You basically give us a guy who’s traveled obviously very far to get to this ...

Dems! I just stumbled onto this while browsing and took a peek. Honestly, I like the whole 'chilled' character as I'm sure everyone behaves differently with stress. My family used ...

Hi there Nike! Kafka went through and did a nice job pointing out the little awkward sentences and words in this short piece so I won't be doing a nitpicky ...

Hey there! Wow, you have some pretty great reviews here and so I'm not sure what else I can add that's different than what's already been said. I enjoyed reading ...

Hey there, I'm going to be doing a review for this piece. There are couple things I want to mention about formatting that might help you and your readers just ...

Oh my, a poem. I'm usually pretty stinky at reviewing these but hopefully you'll find me resourceful. I think you had a pretty good start to this poem and I ...

Hello Mari, Here to review! I thought this was a pretty interesting piece and I actually remember writing a scene similar to this for my novel's guitar playing protagonist. Trying ...