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Interesting, and a bit more than vaguely sexual. I like the rhyme scheme, and the whole schebang, but I can't help but feel a little uncomfortable. Probably not something you ...

Not bad. Not bad at all. Although I do have a few complaints. First and foremost, you are waaaay too direct. It feels like you're just trying to rush the ...

Wow. This is good. Really good. Truth be told I'm not great at poetry, so I can't give much specific advice if it helps. First off, you need to work ...

I like this. Especially how he's kinda forced onto a bit of a side mission rather than launching straight into the main quest. That's an idea I'm going to keep ...

Ouch. I can definitely tell what period of life you're in. Something I'd imagine we can all relate to. This actually has quite some potential. I've seen worse on the ...

This is pretty darn good. I love the rhyming. It's something you don't see too often here. It's all unstructured freeform. Anyway, on the other hand, although I'm glad that ...

This is quite good, and very intriguing. I love your characters, you do them way better than I do, and trust me when I say that I'm taking notes. There ...

Huh. Fascinating. And good I might say. I like the rhyme scheme introduced towards the end, but I also think that you need to spread it out over the rest ...

A great poem that's equal parts imaginative and fun. I like it. As for critique, the only thing I really have to say, I really say for pretty much any ...

Hey there, and welcome to YWS! I think! This looks like the only thing in your portfolio, but your profile says that you have no reviews, so, I don't know ...

Well, I guess I owe you a little something for all of the kindness you've sent my way, so I'll begin by saying this; this is great. Seriously. After commenting ...

Ooh the spite. Usually I'd imagine I'm supposed to critique your writing, but I'll save that for the end. To begin with, don't compare what you find in the nation ...

I'm not sure what you're going for here. You seem to be trying to write a short story, but it looks as though you've kinda forced it into a more ...

Simply stated, I like this. Especially because it's so relatable. The first part at least. It's beautifully done, however I think it could be more. One thing I say about ...

An excellent critique on the apathy of human kind, if I do say so myself. One thing that I find interesting is your seeming attempt to rhyme over the course ...