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On current affairs- I find that every time turn on the news, one more reason to kill myself enters my skull. The variation in important events is shocking; in the news for the week, compare the importance of 500 Syrian refugees to Katie Price's new breasts. The contrast between the first world's priority- materialism and plastic- and the third world's priority- to literally survive one fucking day without getting killed- still exists. It makes me wonder: are there any merits to globalisation? I think not.
On capitalism- This section is one of irony, given how the notebook I wrote this in was made by a private company, and this site is private, but this is not so much a critique on private property, as it is a critique on the divisions created by the system. Capitalism praises the hierarchy and is mock freedom of speech. The majority of those living in the system are milked like they're cash cows. The minority, which lack empathy or a sense of reality, call all the shots. The class divide may not be as relevant as, say, Marx's era (I highly recommend The Communist Manifesto and Das Capital) but it is still alive in the lack of opportunities one gets because of their background and class. Capitalism also allows stupid people, i.e. all people excluding me, to succeed and thrive because their father was the head of a newspaper tycoon. Anyone who is an apologist for the wealthy is about as rational as trying to have sex with a Ken doll.
On radical feminism- There is nothing worse than allowing a bunch of pissed off gargoyles to use Tumblr to seize control of minds through persecution complexes, and there is certainly nothing worse than a minority being more sound than the majority, especially in playing the rape card no matter the criticism levelled at the movement. Feminism is flawed, but radical feminism is pure diarrhoea.
On racism & homophobia- If you are racist you are an old fashioned twunt. If you are homophobic you are an old fashioned twunt. Either way, you barbarians don't deserve a painless death. I despise objectors to the LGBT movement. If you are one of these objectors for religious reasons, I am sorry, but I hate you.
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This is an incredibly interesting piece.
I'll make my review structured so I can lay out my thoughts clearly.
Things I really liked about your work:
1. The layout. I know Scoeri suggested you use an essay format, but I feel that the way you have arranged your work is powerful as it is. Each section is clearly identified, and I liked the length as you did not go into realms of depth too complicated for me to comprehend, but gave enough of your opinion to make me think.
2. Humour. The topics you chose to discuss are all rather complex and heavy in nature. I would have found that it dragged a little if you had written only your opinions. However, the clever, humorous little lines scattered throughout the piece really livened it up and gripped me. My personal favourite line would be:
"There is nothing worse than allowing a bunch of pissed off gargoyles to use Tumblr"
3. The points presented. Now, while I don't agree with everything you've stated, there are certain points you made in your writing that intrigued me. For example:
"compare the importance of 500 Syrian refugees to Katie Price's new breasts."
This really made me think. So often we see stories on the news of what celebrities have been doing in their average daily lives, such as buying a sandwich. These are presented just beside horrific news from places such as Syria or Afghanistan, and your sentence encourages people to think about what we classify as news-worthy, or important.
Overall, I very much enjoyed reading your work. I was interested in your opinions and entertained by the humour. There is nothing that I would change about this piece, as the only sections I did not enjoy where were differences in our opinions occured, and of course I would not tell you to change your world views to compliment my own.
Great work, keep it up!
Ooh the spite. Usually I'd imagine I'm supposed to critique your writing, but I'll save that for the end. To begin with, don't compare what you find in the nation & world section of the newspaper to popular media. It's a terrible idea that'll only leave you with the worst possible view of the world. I think I'll rest my case there. On the matter of globalization, we tend to forget that the removal of poverty is a slow process often taking much longer than we have lived in our short and pathetic lives to lift countries out of the "third world". As for capitalism, while I'll admit that socialism is a good bit superior (my point made via the nordic countries) capitalism isn't nearly as bad as it sounds. You seem to be operating under the misconceptions that the rich get richer while the poor get poorer, and that It's been said that capitalism leaves no option but success. Both of which are very incorrect. Within the United States 80% of all millionaires are self made. Take my father for example. He began his life in the middle of the American deserts in a dirt poor town, living on food stamps and a backyard garden. Today we live on the underside of the upperclass, comfortably situated in a sizable two-story house on the outskirts of Chicago. This goes onto my next point which is that Capitalism guarantees success, which it does not. It merely guarantees opportunity, for which my father is, once again, an excellent example. Also, making such a claim that everyone except for you is an idiot is one of the stupidest things you can possibly do. You rip on racism and homophobia in your last point, but I think it should also be mentioned that discrimination on the merit of intelligence is one of the most close-minded and despicable things you could possibly do. Besides. It took more than you to land men on the moon. It should also be noted that feminism isn't flawed so long as it doesn't get to the point of demonizing the opposite sex. Sexual discrimination still exists after all. Just look at the toys created for young girls if you need an example. Pink and worthless I think. Finally, I'm going to suggest you read a recent letter by Bill Gates and his loving wife. It may shed new light on the state of the world.
As for the writing, not bad. I'd suggest something more of an essay format though, and perhaps a satire for your vehement. Those work quite well. Should you need more of a guide, look to Jonathan Swift. He shares many of your views, and was a master of his craft. Finally, try not to get so emotionally involved. Doing so takes merit from your words. It may also be a good idea to give more examples to support your claims. That's all I have anyway. Thank you for your time and consideration, keep up the hard work, and fare thee well.
-Scoeri