Sassykat

My nerves crummbled at the barrage There's only one 'm'. Or maybe a sailor what i saw Doesn't rhyme. Be persistent, please. It wasn't that defined Saying this is totally ...

Haha! This made me laugh. This was awesome. It was not only humorous, but so true! It's a poem that makes one laugh, causes one to nod their head in ...

It's an excellent piece, and it's obvious you took time to do it, The problem is it really needs more. This is so short you are leaving your readers with ...

Awww, this was reeeeally sweet. :p All I can say is that in poetry you just about always capitalize the first letter of each line unless you are doing one ...

Woooooow. I am in sheer awe of your writing ability. Waaaaaaaooooowwwwwww. *clicks Like* The only thing I would recommend is reading it out loud to yourself. You have some commas ...

Unabashed lush, I, smile You've screwed up the commas a little here, just look a little closer. Read it aloud, it helps, I promise! What a nice poem. It has ...

Hmmm. Very nice, very descriptive, but it just needs a little more...substance. Why is she running? What is she running from? What happened before this? This is a flash, a ...

Iggy got most of the nitpicks, so I'll finish: So This "so" is not really necessary I know that you’re lying, I’ve been hurt many times, O h, I wish ...

Whoa. Powerful. Scary. Amazing. It flows nicely, and regardless of the somewhat dark content, it has an almost reassuring message. It was a most interesting paradox. Nicely done. All I ...

OMG I love you. I love music, and so I could relate to this! Just a few nitpicks: Keys unlock your secrets The very same that make your music Wasn't ...

It's got a fabulous idea, if a bit cliche. All the things I noticed were pointed out, except for one thing: Spread it out! I didn't quite finish reading this ...

What do you mean? It's beautiful! Well, it's not the most cheerful, but it's definitely not depressing. It's hopeful and realistic. Just wondering,though, if you intended to put the apostrophe ...

Fall with me beyond the grasp of Angels a nd Demons. Very pretty. Well worded, well phrased, well done. I loved it! I wonder if "Blue Night" is a better ...

Niiice. Great imagery, though parts of it didn't make a ton of sense. Maybe that's just me not trying very hard right now :-D . Can I just say well ...

Deeeepressing. All I can say is that since you have in the case of punctuation it's all or nothing, at least in my opinion. This can be taken care of ...