Sam

cool...:D we need some critiqueing! (if I spelt that right!)

please do! By the way, Hunter, where's your stuff?

it does sound cool! :D I like neil gaiman too so I'll go pick that up

don't bother, firestarter- there's not really anything TO change!

to agree with nate...yeah, the dialogue needs some work but other than that, you've got a cool story going here. If you've got any more, I really want to read ...

I know...I can't find anything either...well at least it helps to know someone took the time to read it, eh?

wow...I don't know what to say...I love the style! :D *god that sounded awful*

It's pretty short, so there's not all that much you can do to it. :D I liked it, and I couldn't really find any thing to critique.

Yay! That's what I was going make it sound like I'm just typing down what somebody said to me! yay! it works!

woah...this was really great! A lot of people try to vent in their poetry but don't do it correctly...forget the language! this was awesome!

I thought it was OK...the rhyming is unnessecarily pronounced, though. For a poem like this, which a lot of people write, you need to make it special. Write it in ...

Just wait a bit and let something come to you...:D

Thanks! I just read that story and I was so involved before you know it there's 10 chapters...I just admired it, I guess.

*blechhh* I know it's pretty bad...that's OK, I still got revisions to do. (sorry being chatty!)

Yes, the whole 'animals come out to play' just gives it away. Up till that point, we think, 'OK, I get where she's going'. Then you just think maybe this ...